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HeAvEnS AnGeL Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 168The Hot Girl From Canada |
In my dark world, There are no pretty birds. No smiling faces, No nice words to be heard For in my dark world, All the people do is cry. Living in what seems to be hell, Wishing they would die. This horrifying place, Is what we all call home. For nobody loves us, So here we are all alone. I try to escape, With my heartfelt screams. And when I finally get out, It was only just a dream. So while your out there having fun, Dark, stone walls are all I see. sitting in my pool of tears, Thinking about how great life used to be. So untill sombody helps me out, Here in my damp, dark world, Is where I'll stay. Hoping someone will rescue me one day. Don't frown, you never know who is falling in love with your smile :) |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
I can relate to this very very well. You created vivid images.... i love this!  Valerie Why do you do what u do to me baby...you know if I could I'd do anything for you, please don't ignore me cause you know I adore you |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
this hit me hard!...powerful...yet with such real images and true words...i really liked this poem...thanks for sharing it and you have wrote it soooo well...hope to see more and keep writing...  ...?ahhhhh....i'm addicted to passions in poetry!!!!! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was quite sad....I feel you here and if you need somebody to talk too then I am here. Good luck!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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HeAvEnS AnGeL Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 168The Hot Girl From Canada |
Hey dopey Thanks for replying to almost all my poems. im glad to know that sumone actually cares  I would luv to talk to you more. hopefully i can find your email sumwhere lotsa luv Don't judge a person untill you have walked a mile in their shoes, this way your a mile away from them, and you have their shoes. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hey! Just to let you know, I've read ALL your poems that are in teen....if I missed one then point it out... my e-mail is : dopey_dope@hotmail.com |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
What a dark piece. This part I could relate to really well. "sitting in my pool of tears, Thinking about how great life used to be." It was like taking a step back in time. Thanks for the read. ~AF~ Know what you want. Become your real self. |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Well done I really enjoyed the read. Kepp up the good work Zu |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
good job on the title...i didn't expect your poem to turn out on that way...some sort of a twist?? personally, i hope you are recovering from your rough times and i will be glad to listen if you need a ear... take care... |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
~*hugs*~ this is a shock to me I didn't know you feel this way about your life well, how would i know but still, I hope things do go your way keep sharing hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Mic |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Dark but loving it...keep it up! |
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