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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
Hiding from the sun For fear of getting burned Showing no emotion Beacause of what I've learned My soul is red and welted All because of you I showed you that I cared And got hurt through and through The pain will last a while I can't sleep because it stings Try to push it from my mind And think of other things Friends try to make me laugh But it only works for now Like a sunburn cream A cover will endow When the burn goes away It leaves a nice tan One that shows lessons All for love of one man. -=Love starts with a SMILE, grows with a KISS, and ends with a TEAR=- |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
Awesome poem! it rocked. i love the way u described it, it had such meaning. great poem  Curly "Well if you just close your eyes and just imagine everything's alright you should not hide your tears cuz they were sent to wash away those years" |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
really sad poem sorry you have to go thru this guess this is one of life's realities though unpopular and unfair beautifully written poem pixie keep your head up I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
THIS POEM ROCKS!!!! it is by far one of the absolute BEST BEST BEST that you've ever done!!!!!!!! i love you sissah!!!! ~Valerie~ *...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hey nice one here. I like the analogy of the sun cream only lasting a while symbolizing your friends making you laugh. Nice one. Hope all goes well.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
whoa, seriously great poem. One of the few things all of humanity seems to share in one form or another is love. Great imagry with the burn and the tan. Love can take away a great deal, time, money, but one thing that can always be said is it's a lesson learned. Loved it alot, keep it up. >¶Øʆ< |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
thank you all so much for your replies they mean a lot i am glad you all liked this ~*Pixie*~ *Allan wanted me to post that he loves it as well |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Good work. Love the symbolism. Great, great. Love lost stinks, however it is great that you realize it can get better soon!! Lots of luck! xoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? |
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ThyWizard Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 56Chambersburg, PA, USA |
Excellent! Great images and emotion, really moving. I'm sorry that you had to deal with that experience, but as you stated, "It leaves a nice tan One that shows lessons" Rock on... " How can i feel if i can't breathe..." - Godsmack Tryps '01 |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Yeah I agree w/ what dopey said. That was pretty cool. I think the whole poem was a great analogy. Nice work & lol @ Allen. ~Jason "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
Thank you Jason!!  -=Love starts with a SMILE, grows with a KISS, and ends with a TEAR=- |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
Girl, you already know I love this because I freaked out when you read it to me on the phone last night *L* You rock! Oove you! -=Beanie=- |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Hey, this is Bryan, that freak that sits near you in Algebra! lol. Anyway, fantastic work, I love it. "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Omg this poem is amazing..the symbolism rocked!!!! Great work and very creative!! I LOVED IT!!! |
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cutie2005 Member
since 2000-04-30
Posts 148Bennett, Colorado USA |
That was A Great poem!! I loved it! It was a great poem of expressing what you felt!! Nice job!! Luv ya, cutie If you love someone you would go to the end of the world for them! |
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Tears of Glass Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 182Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure |
I'm a little late on this one, but awesome poem. I loved it. I agree with everyone else's comments. But this is a job well done... *Jennifer "My nightmare isn't fearing what I dream... It's waking up, knowing what I'll see." |
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