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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL 
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“Fallen” Beautiful sunlit skies Turn dark with my shattered broken dreams As my soul is left ripping at the seams Crashing down from the clouds so high Ever since you said goodbye Not knowing what to do I am left here to search For the many pieces of my broken heart Upon the land darkness reigns I fear I shall not see your light again Stumbling down upon the fiery ground My mind and body wracked with pain Intensifying with each passing day Turing around I see Nothing , just the darkness alone with me Emptiness pervades all feelings All heart felt distraught Guided by no stars above Heart broken and soulless Mustering the strength to trudge forward through the darkness I wander, searching for the pieces Of a life once lived And love once known It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. I've learned that even when you [This message has been edited by LoneWolf (edited 05-20-2001).] |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
ooooh I like this A LOT.... of course I would, look who's talking *LOL* Anyways, this was great! *prints it* Nice work   ,Suga "A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep." |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done....I enjoyed this poem greatly. You've fallen, but you can get up..so do it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
Thank you both for your replies and your kind words about my poem It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i like the end verse eneded the poem very nicely...overall i enjoye dthe poem...great job and keep writing...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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LCsftball16 Junior Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 39 |
all i can say is wow! i absolutely love this poem! |
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