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princess^sarah
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since 2001-01-12

Posts 131
melbourne

0 posted 2001-05-05 06:24 AM

Children dancing round a fire
Singing happy songs
Of merry little stardust bells
And fairies with long golden curls.

Angles look down from above
And see the love and happiness
What could ever become of these sweet little children?

Children start screaming
Parents eyes are gleaming

Big balls of flames encircle the young

Flesh starts burning
Skin starts peeling

All the happiness in fading away

parents scream,and turn and run,
Screams of pain rise up from the smoke and ashes

Blood streams everywhere
Sirens start.
Adults everywhere.
Panning through the dead children,
Parents cry of sadness and loneliness,
Tears form in the policeman's eyes.

The night started in happiness,
And ended,
In a massive amount of gore.....

princess^sarah
Member

since 2001-01-12

Posts 131
melbourne

1 posted 2001-05-05 06:27 AM

dont anyone dare complain bout how morbid and horrible this is >

grrr

tehe

princess^sarah
Member

since 2001-01-12

Posts 131
melbourne

2 posted 2001-05-05 06:29 AM

GIF89a

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

3 posted 2001-05-05 11:33 AM

Hey Sarah, this really reminded me of one of my oldest poems, "Child," the one that made your mother think I was a psycho.

Did you get any inspiration from that piece to write this one?
I think this is great, you did a marvelous job! It made me shudder with delight.

See ya around.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

4 posted 2001-05-05 03:10 PM

i liked this..it didint seem psychotic at all
and i thought this one interesting..very...
i liked it..and keep writing sarah..cya~

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

lonely*soul
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since 2001-04-05

Posts 396
east haddam (moodus) ct :)

5 posted 2001-05-05 04:28 PM

i liked this..gave me a wicked clear mental pic tho..lol...very interesting!
*KiM*

princess^sarah
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since 2001-01-12

Posts 131
melbourne

6 posted 2001-05-05 10:25 PM

yep allan

your my inspiration

lol

princess^sarah
Member

since 2001-01-12

Posts 131
melbourne

7 posted 2001-05-05 10:25 PM

yep allan

your my inspiration

lol

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

8 posted 2001-05-06 02:24 AM

Yea this was a bit disturbing to me....but nothing alarming....not my kind of poetry, but it was good.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

9 posted 2001-05-06 12:21 PM

Wow. This was pretty good, although it startled me. It's very gory..
Thanks for sharing, just the same.

--Marie

Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry.

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

10 posted 2001-05-06 01:02 PM

A little to much for me, but it was an excellent write. Good imagination. Thanks for sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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