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Crash&Burn Member
since 2001-01-18
Posts 119 |
This is one of my firsts poems I ever made, I'd like to know what you guys think: In Dreams Tis twilight, just and dreary, thou sleeps and dreams in querry. Will yee wake from such a dream, that haunts in twilight's fury. It hides in thou's room, it sneaks into thou's bed it looks into thou's dreams. Did you not feel his prescence I ponder, I wonder, when will thou wake? |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
first of all WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! You posted an amazing piece here. It made me think a lot and read it a couple of times. Very intruiging. I think you've found the right place to post your poems. Thanks for sharing and do post more  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Cute poem. ^_^ Welcome to Passions. |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
welcome to passions. very good poem. i really liked it. hope you keep postin! San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Welcome to Passions! This is a wonderful first piece. I love the old English you use and the style suits you very well. This perticular piece is very thought provoking. I hope to see more of your work soon! PS-check your e-mail! "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Welcome to Passions! Very good poem to start off with. I hope to see you post more and contribute to others poetry aswell. See you around pal!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Wow~ I really liked this. Welcome to passions  Great first post..cant wait to read more*dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
 Welcome to Passions Great start here, you have done a great job of expressing your thoughts in this first post. You need to post more here!! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Welcome to passions!!! I know that you'll like it here just as much as the rest of us do. This was a great first post and i look forward to reading more of your work! Welcome again! |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
first of all welcome to passions!...second unlike your title the poem did not crash and burn, instead it was very well written...crazy things happen in dreams...i sometimes get the feeling that reality is just a crazy dream..ranting sorry thank you and goodnight "It's better to burn out then fade away" |
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Crash&Burn Member
since 2001-01-18
Posts 119 |
 I see the darkness coming all is bleak... |
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