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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA 
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Alone to my thoughts there is no pain Yet everything seems to hurt Self knowledge is what there is to gain My mind I will assert The people around are raging aflame But I’ve not been hurt The flames are static, stay the same My change is borne of berth To be self aware is to accept all other I acknowledge my own faults No man shall harm his equal or brother Violence will come to a halt The flames cause fear and hate among mothers The problem not all can vault None listen when my advice I proffer It stings like alcohol and salt I am not understood, I stand farther apart The results will be everlasting "Some men see things as they are and say why. |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
This is an interesting idea. A very confusing, but interesting idea. And I did like the idea. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Wow, you wrote a lot of powerful stuff when you were away? To be honest, I really do like this stuff.  Some of the best work I've seen out of you.~Allan The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought the message within the poem was great, but I did not like the way it was written. The format was not of personal preference......that's ok........i'm not the one who wrote the poem, so it doesn't matter what I think. Anyhow, I thought you did well on this one....  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
the poem was good but i have lived in solitude 4 awhile but u seemed 2 try 2 express that hurt but it was hard 4 me 2 percieve it thru the poem at ends thought something kinda lacks but... good job though keep writin |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
It was good work. Filled with emotion and powerful messages. hope to see more. regina a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
I liked this but I have to admit It left me confused.Andrew " War is peace, |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
What this is basically about, is that because of all the time I've spent with myself only, I;ve learned a lot about other people. I highly recommend solitude with large groups around you, like sitting alone at a table. Youc an learn a lot. anyway, just something I wrote one day in study hall....sitting alone at my table. Which people avoid by the way :-) No angels in heaven nor demons below the sea, could ever dissever my soul from the soul of the beautiful Annabel Lee |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i knoe people while livin need 2 witness some solitude but from experiences solitude is a lovely place 2 come by once in a while but 2 stay there shows nothingness of life |
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