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Teen Poetry #4

Perfection (senryu)

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

0 posted 2001-01-16 11:41 PM

Total perfection
bound within the walls of flesh
this is what you are

Angel in Flight
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since 2001-01-07

Posts 381

1 posted 2001-01-16 11:43 PM

Allan,
WOW!! what can I say ...*speechless*
This is beautiful short but oh so very powerful. Keep up the wonderful work
~Amanda~

To do anyting LESS then your BEST is to SACRIFICE the GIFT!!!

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

2 posted 2001-01-17 05:36 AM

Allan: Short but sweet. Nice piece.

~AF~

"Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement."
Christopher Fry

"Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentra

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-01-17 01:12 PM

Nice one pal......I presume this about some girl you like. I wouldn't say anybody is even close to perfect, but hey......we can dream.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

4 posted 2001-01-17 09:53 PM

Yeah, just who are you talking about here?

Nice job on it!

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
http://www.thehungersite.com

princess^sarah
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since 2001-01-12

Posts 131
melbourne

5 posted 2001-01-18 04:54 AM

i wuv it

jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01

Posts 1118
State of Despair

6 posted 2001-01-18 06:56 AM

nice, dude your one of the best senyru writers Ive read... nice job bro.

~JDR

"Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

7 posted 2001-01-19 12:56 PM

very sweet...she must be someone really special

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

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