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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
How can there be Love at first sight When all you can see Is the darkness of night? A word of advice From someone Love isn’t someone being nice Love is someone willing to face down a gun If you have love Don’t turn it down Wear it like a glove Let it protect you Love is what makes The worlds go round Even when it shakes There is love in the ground Only humans bring the hate They bring the fear And the destroy the world As they bring it here If you have love If you have life Use it, live it Once you loose them, that’s it Fear is pointless Hate is the same Power is only in your mind In the end it’s only a game It’s all the same to me I can no longer see The point in this place Or in the human race But while you’re here Make the best of it Don’t bother with fear Shy away from hate Do this and you might Find real happiness And might not loose sight Of the point in all of this alright there a parts of this I don't even remember writing and it kinda jumps from subject to subject so it kinda sux but in any case it's all I can post at the moment. >¶Øʆ< |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
This isn't a bad poem but you have written better than this. I think that you present some very good ideas and the concepts behind this piece are good, so with a bit of rewriting to make it more focused this could be a very good poem. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
No no it's very good actually!! I think it was really good! And it's going into my library! No angels in heaven nor demons below the sea, could ever dissever my soul from the soul of the beautiful Annabel Lee |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I think the message within in this poem rocks big time!!! I really liked it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I love the message... This is great, Poet, as usual. Nice one, and keep posting. --Marie It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
You were talking bout love and Dopey agrees with you. That in itself is something to be proud off  Good job"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
this was great. i agree with you totally. "A word of advice From someone Love isn’t someone being nice Love is someone willing to face down a gun" my fav verse. Regina a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, I agree this is great! I liked it  until your next masterpeice-- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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