»
Archives
»
Teen Poetry #4
»
To you I give my heart
| Teen Poetry #4 |
|
To you I give my heart |
|
|
Angel Bee Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176Virginia |
To you I give my heart You came along and in your eyes I could see Everything that you could give to me When you smile I smile too In everything I do, I know I'll find you You came along and took me under Why you are here, I sit and wonder I'm so glad you're here with me You've taken my burdens and set them free You came along and wiped my tears away You comforted me and told me you would stay No matter how far you are, we will never part So for this, to you I give my heart |
||
| © Copyright 2001 Angel Bee - All Rights Reserved | |||
Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Very well done! I loved the flow and rhyme scheme. Excellent job. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
||
|
Dopey Dope
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
You did quite well on this one. Very sweet and the flow worked out just fine. I thought this was very well done.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
||
|
Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Hey there! This is avery sweet poem :-) I really love it, thanks for sharing it! :-) "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
||
|
Acies
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
~*applauds*~ You have expressed yourself really well I like it a lot ~*applauds*~ "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
