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PoeticKnight
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since 2000-01-20

Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

0 posted 2001-01-16 03:44 PM

Betwixt and between the flames and water
Exists a place where souls can be bartered
Anoint with incense and candles burning
Take the guilt from the forever yearning
Perform the rituals of salvation
Speak to me through mystic incantation
Paint me in false golden idolatry
Come and genuflect upon one bent knee
And give offerings of innocent’s blood
In building me up for the better good
Let me cast away the demons of night
Spellbound as they gaze once into thy light
Weave about me a darkened tapestry
Crowned by its token insincerity
Hallow my footsteps with thy bated breath
Await my return from eternal death
With your whispered words I am deified
But upon the truth I am crucified

(Added 4 lines I just had to)

[This message has been edited by PoeticKnight (edited 01-17-2001).]

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-01-16 03:54 PM

Wow........fantastic

-SEA

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2001-01-16 03:55 PM

Oh, I think I need a library solely for old world poetry...

for I am placing this in mine...thank you...

PoeticKnight
Senior Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

3 posted 2001-01-16 04:01 PM

Thanks SEA, and Sunshine, that is a huge compliment. Thanks.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

4 posted 2001-01-16 05:25 PM

Perform the rituals of salvation
Speak to me through mystic incantation
Paint me in false golden idolatry
Come and genuflect upon one bent knee
And give offerings of innocent’s blood
In building me up for the better good
Let me cast away the demons of night
Spellbound as they gaze once into thy light
With your whispered words I am deified
But upon the truth I am crucified
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poetry like this needs to be worshiped
most impressive writing here
excellent and unique phrasing a vocabulary choices
with very cool imagery and vision
very, very, cool write indeed
consider this a sincere genuflect poet sir
take care
jm

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

5 posted 2001-01-17 12:24 PM

whoa....consider yourself...."Deified"...

You have a remarkable talent m'friend.

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

6 posted 2001-01-17 01:48 PM

Wow....sounds like a hard one to let go of. Not all we do in life is as we would have prefered to do it but I believe it all happens for a reason.

I may have read this wrong so just in case I am saving it and plan on re-reading it many times over. Excellent penning.

PoeticKnight
Senior Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

7 posted 2001-01-17 02:21 PM

Thank you very much Mark. I'd be interested in hearing what you got out of it.

mark woolard
Member

since 2001-01-02

Posts 143

8 posted 2001-01-17 02:29 PM

this hits me on many levels. physical and spiritual. i think i can identify with some of it, yet hold my tongue for verification of subject matter.

all in all, though, this is a great piece!

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