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I / Will ( a collaboration with Dark Angel )
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I / Will ( a collaboration with Dark Angel ) |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven 
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I / Will You were lost when my eyes found yours unfocused and without direction, they now glare at this ending, this point, reflecting broken images in shards of shattered happiness, scattering our days into slivers of darkness, confusing nights with shivering silence, fragile resolve cracked. The split, separating I from will dissolution mirrored as tears blink back, damning the pain to rot in fallow soil, where love failed to grow and weeds now thrive, sepulchral monuments rising in vulgar witness to mark the fallen, who lie among them in caustic decay praying for deliverance from eroding pain. Forsaking the memory, a dark horizon looms seeking to change my world, reaching out, to pull me forward with the promise of what is possible, in every tomorrow. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
This is wonderful, and the last two lines reached out and grabbed me with their message. Thank both of you for this one!!  Write on! -<--<--{(@ |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
It's simply wonderful!!! You are a great writing team! I'd like to see more from the two of you.  |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
I enjoyed this.  |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
BRAVO! You two did a fantastic job! It flows as one mind! |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Might I say satpsych??? Should anyone remember it...heh - but that says it guys K |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Great Job! I can't tell where one of you starts and the other one finishes...great melding! |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
We two thank all of you for the kind replies and for taking the time to make them. And K, I am so glad you found it satpsych; I do remember. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Enjoyed this read Great writing from both of ya |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
whenever me and DA try to collaborate it only ends in giggles! great job ya'll |
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WinterTalon Member
since 2001-01-14
Posts 141Brooksville, KY, USA |
Oh! Oh! Good one! ~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~ |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Thank you all, so very much for your kind replies from the bottom of our hearts, Jamie and I do appreciate you all for stopping by and reading Tigger, satpsych" how can we not forget" hehe love that word, er made up word. Thanks hon Jamie, it has been a real pleasure writing with you dear friend, look forward to doing so again Thank you all Maree [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 01-17-2001).] |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
The pleasure is always mine dear..... and look, adding your name to the title got walty to reply to one of my post...lol Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
This is wonderful writing and the message is just perfectly presented...love it brown eyes |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
awesome write you two... the emotional imagery and expression in this is excellent.. you two are a perfect compliment of writing style... very well done glad I didnt miss this... cant keep up in here no more ...things move too fast. take care jm When to the sessions of sweet silent thought, I summon up remembrance of things past ... I sigh the lack of many a thing I sought. ~Shakespeare~ |
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