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Implacable want of Natures ecstasy. / Natures Majesty, Challenge
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Implacable want of Natures ecstasy. / Natures Majesty, Challenge |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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I step closer toward the midst of cooing breeze, the caressing trees, warmth of summer's death. Over the crush of burnt scattered evergreen leaves, the Eucalyptus sigh, escapes her barren breath. Her amorous sway, a silky dance in the gray of night, coloured stars her mirror-ball, a Bush Curley her song. Her lover, a new Autumn moon, her Commander of light, somnolent branches and universe entwine, the night long. I am lost to the understanding of Natures unending, her shimmering blades and clovers of forest green. Where seducing creatures, lick the granite air feeding in perfumed landscapes, stimulating a world unseen. My senses swim the foreign depths of these phenomena where amethyst eyes unblinking stare me to my delicacy. Beside the riverbed, I now sit musing her mystical Aura surrendering to the implacable want of Natures ecstasy. Angel of Darkness 20th March 2001 I may know the word but not say it I may know the truth but not face it I may hear a sound a whisper sacred and profound but turn my head indifferent. Natalie Merchant [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 03-20-2001).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Very beautiful Maree...actually? I found it to be quite, well, SERENE.  I loved the personification here and the prevailing mood of wonder. Just lovely, my sista! |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
"Stimulating a world unseen." There is a "Real World" beyond our "Shadow World", if others see it too. Great work, Maree!! "The poet is the priest of the invisible." |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Oh Maree--this is wonderful, enchanting, intricate, delicate...just superb writing! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I step closer toward the midst of cooing breeze, the caressing trees, warmth of summer's death. Over the crush of burnt scattered evergreen leaves, the Eucalyptus sigh, escapes her barren breath. ================= Her lover, a new Autumn moon, her Commander of light, somnolent branches and universe entwine, the night long. ==================== Where seducing creatures, lick the granite air feeding in perfumed landscapes, stimulating a world unseen. My senses swim the foreign depths of these phenomena where amethyst eyes unblinking stare me to my delicacy. Beside the riverbed, I now sit musing her mystical Aura surrendering to the implacable want of Natures ecstasy. =================== Maree this is superb writing!! wonderful imagery... very cool and unique descriptions and excellent use of unique vocabulary choices and poetic phrasing.... "somnolent branches and universe entwine" (way cool line.."somnolent" very cool)  and the inner rhyme added to its cadence pleasures very well done poetess. We wish ourselves beautiful, |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Maree, this is absolutely beautiful...you've done a superb job describing the wonders of nature. Gorgeous work my friend!  *Krista Knutson* |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
WOOOOHOOOOOO!! I knew you could do it!!!!!! And did you ever do it! One of your best, this absolutely terrific Maree!! Way to go! I hope this breaks that dry spell.  <*\\\>< |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
wow totaaly fruit loopin awesome miss DA |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Here is my critique Roo: What the HELL ARE YOU DOING IN BASIC ENGLISH? GET OUT! Get out I say...get thee to advanced immediately! Sheesh woman. You don't NEED to start at the bottom love. Take my word for it. Hugs  Tigger |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Oops library and all... |
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Jellybean King Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 153Jelly, Bean |
oh...this is great, great writing...I loved all lines but these are my favorite: "My senses swim the foreign depths of these phenomena where amethyst eyes unblinking stare me to my delicacy. Beside the riverbed, I now sit musing her mystical Aura surrendering to the implacable want of Natures ecstasy." ...really captures the mystical qualities of Nature, so well. Jellybean King |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Wonderful Maree,, or might I dare say, Satpsyche. And the naked replacement is great, (but i think i preferred lean to step...heh)..And K is right..! ignore the next post..clicked twice--oops Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". [This message has been edited by Jamie (edited 03-26-2001).] |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
see above [This message has been edited by Jamie (edited 03-26-2001).] |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Still AWESOME, Maree. WhAt cAN i SAY. agaiN wE ReAd, AnD ArE AbSoRBed. Thanks. |
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