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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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mandala whispers "be aware" sandcastles bleeding into air as the tide recedes...pull wind, with promises to build again. every grain be counted now usurping form of molded vow as the sun relentless stares and water's play sprays unaware droplets not enough to keep the chiseling of mad wind's weep... and as the sun colors the sky to mark the end of day's demise the tide returns from sea to beach sandcastles remnants, swept from me. [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 03-19-2001).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Beautiful setting and the mood is marvelous...good images ....a wonderful write! Any thing that gets swept away can be built again....take care. The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
oopss...didn't think anyone was watching...so I did a quick edit...lol..hope ya still like it! grin....hugs, p.b. (poet buddy) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
mandala whispers "be aware" sandcastles bleeding into air as the tide recedes...pull wind, with promises to build again. ==================== droplets not enough to keep the chiseling of mad wind's weep... and as the sun colors the sky to mark the end of day's demise the tide returns from sea to beach sandcastles remnants, swept from me. ===================== this is so delicate and lovely in its bittersweet frailty ... beautiful rhymes and images me twin hugs  me We wish ourselves beautiful, |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
 Just read an old post of yours in one of the other Forums.... will be in touch with you later.... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Serenity, True but sandcastles remain in the mind. Beautiful, enjoyed. |
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bslicker 
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
As the sandcastles are built and washed away by the waves or the mother nature, so is the the things that are built in our heart. Yours too......  Bernie Bernie Slicker |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
I like watching children build them on the beach ... they react with a playful attitude ... they just keep building them closer to the water [This message has been edited by Rex Allen McCoy (edited 03-19-2001).] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
what did they hold? only time will tell . . . wonderful my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Love this one, the images are wonderful. S |
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ATelamon Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 328Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up |
Perhaps sandcastles are simply sculpted life built with hurried caring as we feel the tide approaching impermanent as we humans are in truth sandcastles are all our homes "Be your own hero. Save your interior landscape. As in all mythos the blight can be defeated and the land turned back to freedom and fertility. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
YOU!!!! You are awesome ya know? Sometimes we need to let the waves steal back what we first stole...so we can start again...hugs darlin |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
how you crank these out everyday is a feat of awesome-ness. a beauty of a rhyme here. i just moved back to california (san diego) and i must say this paints a truly calming and provoking picture... i LIKE it. i like it a lot. hehehe. You gotta love livin, cause dyin's a pain in the ass. |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
How do you do it? I am amazed. Over and over again you wow me. You say you like mine, I pale in comparison. I'm not worthy. *L* |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Serenity~ dear heart, you are fantastic! and so is this poem! SEA |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
JM...thank you, finally a sandcastle that won't wash away. You always touch me with your thoughtfulness! Hugs! Kari? Your concern touched my heart as well...was quite a memorable day, considering it's the fifth time in four months I set the house on fire...sigh...and? worry not...with all of this practice? I'm pretty good at putting out my own fires!  bernie---I thank you for that sweet thought---hugs and gratitude! Rex? it's either that, or dig a trench--but true, children do live in the moment, don't they? Thank you my dear friend. Hope you are well.Sven...I think part of the sadness is that there's seldom a trace...wasn't as bad as the nude sand woman I built once, sunbathing...grin, and? her breasts kept blowing away!  and what did she hold? a Budweiser! Sandra, thank you much, and I'm so pleased to see your spirits have picked up! Hugs. AT---yes, that's the only way to look at it...the only constant IS change! Thank you! Paula...You've been a sweetheart...thanks to you too...(I do make friends out of the oddest circumstances) Ethan, my friend I've missed you! So happy to see you posting again...and? I'm trying to catch up on my reading tonite...will be reading YOU! PK---you DO say the sweetest things!  SEA...I love your enthusiasm, and admire your work much....HUGS and thanks to you, lady! seymour? forgive me...I came back just to thank you. I love your poetry, and wouldn't dream of slighting you! Thanks for reading. You honor me. Thanks to the forum for being so patient with me while I iron out my pc probs---You guys ARE great! and still yet another Jethro Tull quote: "and the sandcastle virtues, are all swept away, in the tidal destruction- the moral melee. The elastic retreat rings the close of the day as the last wave uncovers the new-fangled way. But your new shoes are worn at the heels and your suntan does rapidly peel and your wise men don't know how it feels---to be thick as a brick" [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 03-22-2001).] |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
serenity - what a soft beautiful writing. I like it very much. Very touching. BC |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks Bill. You are kinda touching yourself! |
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