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Rose My first haiku
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Rose My first haiku |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone 
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The rose is wilting unattended far too long you should have cared more. |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Roses are beautiful, but delicate. Well done! A quarter of a century must pass, for the writer to understand what and why he writes. |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
This one makes me want to try a haiku. I like it. Joyce |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
Wow, rose need care, just as the heart does also.. Great write  Bernie Bernie Slicker |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
petals fall to floor not the way a love should die wilting, dry, no more Cat.....wonderful...... |
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athena4 Senior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 622 |
Sandra, This is a beauty. I think someone should have tended to his garden with more care and love. This rose is too beautiful to be neglected... Love, Elise |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Ah S, truly a shame. Heavy haiku here. *Peace you, in every way possible. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I must echo what Elise said. . . for truly a rose must be cared for. . . wonderful Sandra. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
Haiku is a wonderful form. Although this deals with a sad subject, I hope you continue to post haiku. Julian Lester |
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KokoStewartKoomoa Senior Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 580Waikiki, Hawaii |
Twas a lovely lovely first haiku Haiku generally are about happy topics. They are more than just 5-7-5 syl structure, meant to meditate and lift the soul..... making the reader say ahhhhhh!!!! I hope that helps just a lil' bit for more haiku  This was a well expressed poem and heartfelt! Hugs, Koko Passion,imagination and intellect running together... Poetry in motion~~~ Aloha with warmest regards, Koko [This message has been edited by KokoStewartKoomoa (edited 03-17-2001).] |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
A wonderfully penned first haiku, although so sad  You used an excellent metaphor, sorry that you are left with the thorns~Take care, Melissa~ |
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