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Disgruntled Junior Member
since 2001-03-01
Posts 13 |
Looking into your eyes, I feel it rising, My heart in my throat, Its not surprising, This feeling has come, So many times, I seek to express it, With these feeble rhymes, Should I tell you my feelings, Take the big leap, Or maybe I should wait, For the coming week, Torn in two, Will I disclose them, I hesitate on the brink, Fearing we won't make the link, I'm afraid of rejection, Of losing what that which I have, I would make you my goddess, But I'm afraid you would laugh, I stand before you now, My mind is set, Your rosebud lips, Have made me your pet, Do what you will, Laugh if you may, But I swear to you now, I'll never regret this day. |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
This is so romantic and sweet...but you said the 'never' word. AARRGGHHH! I hope your stars never dim, you write beatifully of the beginnings of love. |
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ATelamon Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 328Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up |
Rent apart inside out How could this not speak to many Well said AT |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
oh yes, do make her your goddess......  that is so perfect! Enjoyed this very much SEA |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
No better time than the present to let one know how you feel. I say GO FOR IT! <*\\\>< I know not what the future holds, but I know Who holds the future. I don't question YOUR existance - GOD |
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Disgruntled Junior Member
since 2001-03-01
Posts 13 |
I would just like to thank everybody who replied or even just read the few poems ive posted. I must say that I am very impressed by the material ive found posted on this site and admit that mine seem like theyve been written by a child in comparison. I just wanted to say that even though i dont reply to any of the posts it is not out of disrespect or for not liking it, it is because I wouldnt have enough time to write all of the praise that i would feel compelled to inscribe. thank you and i enjoy and am in awe of everybodies work here |
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