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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa 
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Proposition Take my hand and walk with me along the cliffs beside the sea, and feel the thrill of surf and spray that chases all our doubts away, then gaze into that boiling jade till one by one the memories fade, and we are one, like sky and sea not you and I but only we, Promise this, my love you must till ashes to ashes and dust to dust. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
*sigh*...... isn't this romantic?! Just love it  SEA |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
A place that takes doubts away and where memories fade...I'll take a ticket! Make that first class! |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Beautiful and sweet. I can't imagine anyone declining... Very nicely done. Poeminister |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
then gaze into that boiling jade till one by one the memories fade, and we are one, like sky and sea not you and I but only we, Promise this, my love you must till ashes to ashes and dust to dust. ================== perfect poetic phrasing kissed with melodic cadence love the romantic devotions in this gem very cool write Olias Strange ... the desire for certain pleasures is a part of my pain. ~Kahlil Gibran~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Such sweet romance... I like this much! *S* |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
"boiling jade"... beautiful. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Now this one is a song of love filled with a cadence and tune that begs to be sung. Superb writing and beautiful sentiments. Loved it much. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Olias that's so well done...I just love reading it...I'm so much into those kinds of words that aren't too complicated when it comes to the poetry of love. But the economy of your words of love are so well arranged from the heart that the message of unending love is so compelling...just fab stuff I love it!! The setting is one of the most beautiful in the world and you captured it so well.....ethome The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
Wonderfully perfect....thanks Packratmike |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
To walk beside the sea with you To share our hearts, to be brand new To fall into your love, and into your eyes To lose myself within your sighs I accept what you offer with passion and pride To walk with you always, side by side... Beautiful Olias |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Thank you everyone for your kind replies, I am overwhelmed by your wonderful responses. Thank you again poet friends. Regards to everyone and Take care, Olias. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'Take my hand and walk with me along the cliffs beside the sea, and feel the thrill of surf and spray that chases all our doubts away,' This is wonderful, Olias! So romantic...I love it!! sp  do I believe we'd be better off apart? can I see my world without you in it? baby, not for a single minute... |
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