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Icing on the Cake |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Icing on the Cake "I want more than just the icing on the cake" and the words stuck for without the cake where would the icing be? relationships are not built on promises per se although some do seem that way so to start from scratch it's what we do to carry the commitment all the way through gather the eggs up from the hen sift the flour then sift again a pinch of salt some sugar will do this recipe is good for two stir complete and temper it right and it will rise fair and light but beat too hard or let loose a shout or burn with words we could do without and the cake will falter and fall a bitter taste left in the mouths of all so before you whip the icing up make sure the cake will pass the test for sweetest icing should be saved only for the very best… Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
*and Melissa climbs a mountain and sings "I luv it, I luv it!  My library must have this gem! I agree! This should be in the homes of newlyweds as a daily reminder. Well expressed with flair with an excellent theme and use of metaphors. Well done Karilea~Take care, Melissa~ |
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Sunlit Soul Junior Member
since 2001-02-05
Posts 37Never Land |
Ah, how very true! A great way of putting it, well written my fellow sunshine friend!  "Every man dies. Not every man lives." -Tim Robbins |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea--How do you keep writing so many and such really well done poems? I love the metaphore of the cake...a great message here, my friend. Can I have your recipe? |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
I do believe everyone one could agree with this one~ ~*Peachy Be*~ |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
It takes the icing AND the cake To make the beauty whole But lucky is the finger that's Allowed to scrape the bowl!! This is a wonderful metaphorical poem, Sunshine. Cake alone lacks flavor. Icing alone can make one sick. But, together, they are dynamite!!!  like this one.... |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
for sweetest icing should be saved only for the very best… Oh Karilea...you weave the heart here...I'm smiling and nodding my head in agreement!! Loved it!! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Melybee climbing mountains...now that I can see!... Thank you Sunlit... Martie...because I want to keep this gift very, very much...that's why I try...but I do share my muse when I can...she is the one with the recipes... Thank you Voiceless...I hope so... 'Deer, you summed it up quite nicely... Holly, I see your nod, I really do! Thank you all... |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hi, this is great! You can take any object and make it about love. You are awesome... Sandra |
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Puck Junior Member
since 2001-02-21
Posts 14Oberon's Palace |
Sunshine, this is really divine, I wonder if you'd make me a cake. A fairy cake  And don't give me any old icing I would like some sunshine on mine.Wonderful poem have some smiles and my dust :: Iam that merry wanderer of the night I jest to Oberon, and make him smile Puck |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Great analogy Sunshine, well done!!! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
This is nice Sunshine...I always thought if I treated a woman really good then I would get the icing on the cake...not necessarily true...some are upside down cakes...some don't have icing...James |
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NC Member
since 2001-02-20
Posts 89 |
very nice, Sunshine and lots of truth mixed in too! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I'm definitely not a baker but that is very delightful...I enjoyed the read very much! It's always good to be a reader witness to your different types of creativeness...good work! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
I like the taste of this. Wonderfully said. Poeminister [This message has been edited by Poeminister (edited 02-21-2001).] |
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