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Flattened Senryu
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Flattened Senryu |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME 
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Flattened You bulldoze your way Across insignificance That I call my life. I fear being crushed More than I fear your contempt For weakness. I move. Does the jellyfish Hope to win the approval Of its predators? |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Wow! That's a powerful rebuke! Well-done! |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
very cool mar! i like  hugs, g "maybe one day we can turn and face our fears maybe one day we can reach out through our tears..." -a grant |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Well Done! resounding applause from me. Write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Enjoyed these. Nicely done. Poeminister |
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ATelamon Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 328Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up |
Very nice interconnection between the three. Very nice indeed. "Time is merely change. It neither enslaves nor determines us. It is instead our opportunity for self-definition" |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
loved and enjoyed reading these wonderful senryu's Charisma |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Does the jellyfish have to win the approval of it's predators...I love this!!!!! |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
i have to say these three are the most breath-taking senryus i have read in a while... terrific job  |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
Virginia - Thanks. Wish I had the nerve to say it to the people that need to hear it. Gale - Thank you. hugs backKethry - A graceful and grateful bow to you. Poeminster - Glad you enjoyed. Thank you. ATelamon - Thank you. Your comment is greatly appreciated. Charisma - I am pleased that you enjoyed these, as you do this form so well yourself! JLR - Bless you! I'm thrilled you picked that one out. I was pleased with the image myself. Thank you.Kaile - That reply kind of takes my breath away, my friend. I know you enjoy this form. Thank you very much.To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Marilyn; exquisite senryu! We don't need anyone"s approval! for sure...wonderful wisdom! love, Ellie A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
this came to me when i was reading your reply.... I would drop my tail at the very sight of you Only, I lack one BTTT this goes |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
Ellie - Thanks for coming over here to read this. No, maybe we don't need anyone's approval, but I certainly do like having yours! Thank you. hugs Kaile - LOL@you. Thanks for your additional poetic response. You made my day.To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
kcs.... Great senryu's and I must agree biting tough. Parker |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
Parker - Thanks.  I'm not really so tough. To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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