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Walter Poe
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0 posted 2001-02-09 10:38 AM


I saw her for the first
on new hallows eve
when the ghost walked
and demons feed


Yet her alone my eyes did see
In the moonlight
In my dreamworld
On new hallows eve


I saw her again
when the snows came
and the year feigned
with heart and good cheer

Her eyes sought me
In the night
In the snow
On the eve of new year

We loved for an evening
But when morning came
like a phantom in visions
she dissolved in the rain

A winter, a Summer
A winter again
I searched for those eyes
but didn't see them again

On the night of the 6th
The winds that blew
With her eyes still on me
The winds spoke of her true.

The wind brought her
Outside to my door
she appeared as if
she had never been gone.

We sat and looked at times
long gone by at the past
   vivid
in the love
In my eyes

In the morning
my angel returns to the skies
where she shone more beautiful
than the stars.

PART II

As the planets turned
My hair burnished silver
My love did not dwindle
In the autumn of my days

I saw her again
as the past turned to dust
in my mind and the black
Filled my world

I saw her still
As she was
As she has always
And will always be

The beauty of eternity
The beauty of death
She holds my hand
as we cross the Threshold

A man always searching
Never finding
alone forever
with his one true love




The very deep did rot: O Christ!
That ever this should be!
Yea, slimy things did crawl with legs
Upon the slimy sea.


[This message has been edited by Walter Poe (edited 02-09-2001).]

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Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
1 posted 2001-02-09 10:46 AM


Poe,
All very true, You touched on some major points. Enjoyed the read.

serenity blaze
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Posts 27738

2 posted 2001-02-09 02:38 PM


Excellent as always. You manage to combine mystery and depth simultaneously...loved the images of passing time too...LOVE your work!

" Only those who risk going too far can possibly find out how far one can go."
T.S. Eliot


A Whisper's Caress
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since 2000-11-03
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on the horizon of a fairytale
3 posted 2001-02-09 04:58 PM


just wonderful....

thunderous applause!!!!!


Look within the heart of a poet, and you will see a reflection of their soul.



Marge Tindal
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4 posted 2001-02-09 07:10 PM


WalterPoe~
This is such an ethereal piece ...
Oh, how tenderly you conveyed your feelings.
Wonderful read !
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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VAS
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Oregon
5 posted 2001-02-09 07:19 PM


Walter, This has a wonderful feel to it, many emotions are gently felt as I read it.  

I would suggest trying to find another word for the 6th stanza.  Using again twice really detracts from the beauty of the piece.  Well it feels that way to me anyway.

I like the ethereal feel to this and almost a sense of caressing.

vandana
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6 posted 2001-02-09 07:21 PM


like this much
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