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Moon Running
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Moon Running |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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Under the moon you'll go running for the man you call your lover. And you'll find out that he's drowning in the Devil's sacred water. And your sore heart can't condone it while your heavy mind grows weak, and you'll secretly be crying while you're acting so discreet. And it's hats off to you my friend, you're lost and found where you started with him. Your heart's still spinning like a leaf in the wind moon running takes you to the limit again. So you search outside your crying to bring him back again. Smoke filled rooms are the climate where you'll end up finding him. And you know he could be lying with sweet words to smother sorrow. Inside his eyes he'll be smiling cause you'll be with him tommorrow. You're so sure that he'll make changes cause he's got no happy face but you wind up turning pages in the history book you hate. And you find yourself moon running chasing visions while you're able with your memories made from legends of an ancient fairytale. Well it's hats off to you my friend, you're lost and found where you started with him. Your heart's still spinning like a leaf in the wind moon running takes you to the limit again. Reality seldom bears the possibilities of imagination! [This message has been edited by ethome (edited 02-08-2001).] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Wow! How do you know all this! This leaves me spinning. I think I'll stay away from the moon I love your writing It's life in blatant terms, but poetically superb Liz |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* oh my gosh, dear friend, this is too close for comfort. Well written. You have captured so much emotion with your musical words. I am so glad I was able to read your work today. Thank you. Much love and hugs from me to you. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. http://www.voy.com/7622/ http://www.powerpoems.com |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
once again....magic from the man who knows....this is awesome....and leaves one humbled.... Wonderful.... |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
EXCELLENT! You've captured this in a wonderful style. Been there, done that, no more!  To capture and live a moment is truly living |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Its so good to see your poetry once again gracing these pages...you have been missed...this is very emotionally written and it just hits my heart...hugs |
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Beverley Member
since 2000-07-09
Posts 97England |
P T dear heart, I'm a guttersnipe, I haven't got any manners  Is this good, I don't know me! (So now do you want to real me to swan in and say that this is utterly awesome.) You knew I would, yes yes I know I can't ever tie my heart up and hope it won't be touched by your beauty, by your awesome ability to leave me breathless. Oh to be a real poet, and no I'm not jealous, because this is a wonderful utterly fabulous poem. Of course it is you wrote it.So was that constructive, and mannered, possibly, it was truth. and that is a fact. I love it and I've missed you too. Welcome home poety's blues man Love you dear heart Take care love as always Mushy And while thy willing soul transpires At every pore with instant fire Andrew Marvell 1621-1678 |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Sorry love, Beverley is me, I had to log in and get the name sorted and forgot to change it back Sorry! Still it's an extra reply and another few mins where it belongs right at the top of page one. Love Mushy Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Sunlit Soul Junior Member
since 2001-02-05
Posts 37Never Land |
A unique flow here with a lot of truth and some really cool images. I really liked this!  "Every man dies. Not every man lives." -Tim Robbins |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
wonderful. . . wonderful. . . wonderful. . . did you get that I really liked this one??? excellent!! ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Under the moon you'll go running for the man you call your lover. And you'll find out that he's drowning in the Devil's sacred water. And your sore heart can't condone it while your heavy mind grows weak, and you'll secretly be crying while you're acting so discreet. And it's hats off to you my friend you're lost and found where you started with him. Your heart's still spinning like a leaf in the wind moon running takes you to the limit again. ================= oh E-babes ... you rock ... this is SOOO cool .... work that cadence ... work those metaphors rock us with the imagery ... hang that moon I am SOO digging this ... and HEY ... dont stay away so long ya hear me very very cool write ...very cool poet too Tomorrow holds only mystery And who's to say what might be But in you I've found a love so strong The sun and the moon look on in jealousy ~VH~ |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I enjoyed the flow of this read, so much it took me smoothly through and I felt it developing....nice job "I walked beside the evening sea and dreamed a dream that could not be." George William Curtis |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Elizabeth ...I guess I get this stuff off the roads of life... thanks so much for your wonderful comments Startime I am so glad you could take the time to read this and realize the purpose of the words...thanks ethome Sunshine thank you so much for the fine comment I really appreciate your words. Thank you Paula it's so great to be back here writing I always enjoy it here so much Dreamkeeper thank you for the excellent word I truly do appreciate it so much! Beverly Mushy thank you for taking the time to read this and then to make such wonderful comments on the content. You are so kind with your words thanks again....ethome Thank you Sunlit Soul for the comments on the imagery and the work I most certainly appreciate it so much!! And my dear Janet how can I say how much I appreciate your comments here and all the many fine comments from the past where you have been so connected to the music within me. I do it for the love of it and I will never stop until I come in contact with that fatal disease called death. Thank you again you're VANtastic!! Reality seldom bears the possibilities of imagination! |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
ethome-- Love your moon-writing. Nicely done. Poeminister "...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." -Poe |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
wonderful.....oh my....fabulous piece.....outstanding work my friend. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Sven! somehow I missed you when I was making replies...how could I be so silly because you gave me three wonderfuls...so I have to say thank you and sorry all the same time...thanks ethome Kathleen my dear sweet poet lady I missed you also but I think you snuck in there while I was replying to the others...thanks so much for reading ethome |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Poeminister for the moon running comment I appreciate it...ethome Thanks Charisma for taking the time to read this....ethome Reality seldom bears the possibilities of imagination! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This has a cadence that makes music all its own... Granted, it's not soothing, drift off to sleep music... but so many of us need to heed the drumbeats heard in "but you wind up turning pages in the history book you hate." This is excellent! |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Wow, a very impressive piece you've written here ethome....great poem! Nathan |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ethome--Again your words make my feet tap...oh I would like to hear this playing on my radio...what a sound!! |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
Loved this Ethome, it's hats off to you my friend. |
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