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Help Me To Fall
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Help Me To Fall |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA 
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Help Me To Fall I’m stuck on the edge Yet my back’s on the wall I try to hold back As I give you my all I’m dying to soar I’m living to fly I’m screaming inside While outside I sigh Please help me to fall I stand on the precipice Between future and past The moment I’ve wanted Finally here at last And I’m scared to hold on Afraid to let go Caught between the familiar And what I don’t know Lord, help me to fall Your hands show no mercy As they sentence my skin To burn with desire From passions within How slowly I smolder How quick I ignite Lost in the darkness Found in your light So help me to fall I’m falling fast now I’m holding my breath I’m closing my eyes Yet seeing love’s depth You kiss me once more I tighten, I slack I’m sinking, I’m rising There’s no turning back As you help me to fall ~ Ruth www.angelfire.com/pa/OriginalMinds/index.html |
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USBZoso Junior Member
since 2001-02-05
Posts 20 |
sweet orgasm song, lady |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Hmmm....USBZoso, I think you may have misunderstood this one a bit. It's actually about being afraid to let go, to give into love once more. It tries to explain the fight going on inside of one who has fallen (in love) before and is afraid to fall again and the confusion and finally the release as she gives herself over to love. Thank you for your comments though...brought a bit of a smile to my face  ~ Ruth www.angelfire.com/pa/OriginalMinds/index.html |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
sounds like you are on your way!!! "I walked beside the evening sea and dreamed a dream that could not be." George William Curtis |
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USBZoso Junior Member
since 2001-02-05
Posts 20 |
Ohh yeah? then what's this? "I’m falling fast now I’m holding my breath I’m closing my eyes Yet seeing love’s depth You kiss me once more I tighten, I slack I’m sinking, I’m rising There’s no turning back As you help me to fall" Sound pretty much like orgasm to me. See for yourself, might not notice it at the first time. Well anyway i am here to entertain myself not others. Hehe Stan |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Kathleen...thank you Stan...I know exactly what the poem says as I wrote it and I guess it depends on how you look at things: I’m falling fast now (Falling in love) I’m holding my breath (Because I'm afraid to fall) I’m closing my eyes (I don't want to see what's below when I fall) Yet seeing love’s depth (Pretty self explanatory) Just kiss me once more (Same here) I tighten, I slack (I pull back, I give a little more) I’m sinking, I’m rising (I'm sinking into the depths of love, I'm rising above the ordinary) There’s no turning back (I've lost love's battle, but also won) As you help me to fall ~ Ruth www.angelfire.com/pa/OriginalMinds/index.html |
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USBZoso Junior Member
since 2001-02-05
Posts 20 |
it sounds to me like you are talking to yourself here! HELLO!??!?!? do you know what poetry is? its not what you write, its how i see it all about perception, lady you crazy people are so selfish its not all about you, snap out of it Read, Special |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Stan...I've read special and yes, I do know what poetry is (with over 45 poems published, I'd better know what it is) and yes, everyone percieves poetry in a different way. If my poetry moved you in anyway, it was successful, regardless of your interpretation of it. |
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USBZoso Junior Member
since 2001-02-05
Posts 20 |
you are still such a girl behind a school desk... i like that Stan |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Ruth, well expressed from a woman who was scared to let anyone close to her. I relate very much and am often afraid of falling in love, and I push it away so that I won't get hurt. I have always loved your style and your personal reflection in your poems. This really touched me, I relate to a tee. But then again, I'm sure that Rodger helped you to fall in true love... I'm very happy for you! Take care, Melissa~ |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
Well written. Self expressive, honest and penned well. And yes, each individual interprets a poem in their own way.. As is the success of the poem, if there is no interpretation, there is no poem. Good write. With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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Wesley the Blue Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 426Forest Lake, MN, USA |
Wonderfully writen. It had a unique flow to it that I dont often see. Thanks for letting us read it. Keith every day is a new day with which we can change the world |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
truth on both sides - what you felt writing = AND - how readers percieve - The multiple gifts of great poetry |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
this is so honest, so open, so beautiful |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ruth--What a beautiful and well done poem...sounds like you have a case of the jitters...here's a little push from me. Hugs, my friend. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I stand on the precipice Between future and past The moment I’ve wanted Finally here at last And I’m scared to hold on Afraid to let go Caught between the familiar And what I don’t know Lord, help me to fall ========================= I’m falling fast now I’m holding my breath I’m closing my eyes Yet seeing love’s depth You kiss me once more I tighten, I slack I’m sinking, I’m rising There’s no turning back As you help me to fall ===================== I love this poem Hoot-girl ... very very cool ... you have captured perfectly the mix of anticpation and helplessness the heart feels when falling.... wonderful cadence and flow... and the repetion of the last line made the poem.(as did those fires ingniting)  very well done poetess (the poem & the replies) Tomorrow holds only mystery And who's to say what might be But in you I've found a love so strong The sun and the moon look on in jealousy ~VH~ |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Ruth~ Great poem. I understood it completely. Hugs, Deb |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Ruth, Sometimes we have to face our fears my friend to find happiness. Best wishes to you. ~HUGS~ Jennifer Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautiful, Ruth, very beautiful!! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I just want to thank everyone for your comments on this one. Yes, falling is never easy nor is letting go of the past to finally visualize the future. In 3 days, I'll make the plunge and Lord how wonderful it feels to fall ~ Ruth www.angelfire.com/pa/OriginalMinds/index.html |
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