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spiked
Senior Member

since 2000-01-13

Posts 873
Hammond, La USA

0 posted 2001-01-29 07:35 PM

The flicker of the flaming light
Casts shadows on the ceiling
I want so much to make it bright
The way has no revealing

A scream out loud
That has no sound
The want for love
That has no bound

The rain that falls so carelessly
An echoed sound like in some dream
Where life can always turn out right
No misdirection on this flight

Please take the match
And light my flame
In silence I will still remain
The essence of a lover’s heart
Deserving all for which I've fought
To pass along each day.

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

1 posted 2001-01-29 07:37 PM

The rain that falls so carelessly
An echoed sound like in some dream
Where life can always turn out right
No misdirection on this flight

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Great write and especially liked the above verse. The flow was excellent and the Title nothing short of "Perfect"

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2001-01-29 10:56 PM

Rich~ this is gorgeous! Wow......I liked this very much

-SEA

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

3 posted 2001-01-29 11:37 PM

Lovely Rich..enjoyed your words

~V~

A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

4 posted 2001-01-29 11:44 PM

I really liked the form and the flow of rhyme here...and the loneliness just aches off the screen here...very, very nice, Rich!

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

5 posted 2001-01-30 12:31 PM

I want so much to make it bright
The way has no revealing
====================
The rain that falls so carelessly
An echoed sound like in some dream
Where life can always turn out right
No misdirection on this flight

Please take the match
And light my flame
In silence I will still remain
The essence of a lover’s heart
Deserving all for which I've fought
To pass along each day.
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very ... very cool write...VERY
cadence kissed longing ...
indeed poet sir...way cool

If my slight Muse do please these curious days ...
The pain be mine ...
but thine shall be the praise.

~Shakespeare~

spiked
Senior Member

since 2000-01-13

Posts 873
Hammond, La USA

6 posted 2001-01-30 12:41 PM

Mark very much enjoyed writing this. Give credit to the Stormy New Orleans weather today.
Thank you Sea and "V"
Serene Have learned I flow best in this form. Thanks
Kool Reply Janet

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

7 posted 2001-01-31 10:51 AM

stormy weather is a great muse!

Kathleen

spiked
Senior Member

since 2000-01-13

Posts 873
Hammond, La USA

8 posted 2001-01-31 06:38 PM

Very true Kathleen and much enjoyed at that.
Thank you
Rich

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