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The Intensity
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The Intensity |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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The Intensity Intensity hovers over this stricken shell of you a dagger sharp thrust oh I can hear you bleed each cell a scream that grips me to my place on the flannel my heart would cover and when I touch your skin it is parchment and crackles like my soft finger is fire in the wound of you How spare life this rugged end and why must pain be last like a house so strong and sure you are covered with gasoline and who has the match to end the suffering of your scared walls the cellar drags me down and I can hear screaming screaming so soft that it blurs my questions for I want to ask you if you can see the other side where the sunset melts and yet your frailty cannot reach me with miracles and only down down I go into the black pit that holds my heart waiting for your sweet release [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 01-27-2001).] |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
OH,MY,do you feel this way all over or just in spots? I "like" this, but it also makes me shiver. Hugs, ME |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Martie, my gosh girl, where did this come from? Certainly not that smiling face that graces our blue walls... you titled this one quite appropriately, for intense, my dear, it is! Somehow, tho, I know what you say, but that is not surprising, is it.... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mother Earth--I am upset about my friend who is dying...I feel it in my heart. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ 'for I want to ask you if you can see the other side where the sunset melts' Walking-the-fire with another is an act of love and kindness~ And when the sunset melts there will be found peace~ eternal eternal ... *Hugs*, sweet lady. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Martie, I am sorry to hear about your friend, and I do believe you feel it in your heart. yes the intensity... *HUGS* Martie Maree |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
It's not easy to see someone that we love suffering so...you have described it perfectly. HUGS Denise |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
this poem shares its title. . . from your heart my friend. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
"and yet your frailty cannot reach me with miracles and only down down I go into the black pit that holds my heart waiting for your sweet release" --So incredibly sad Martie...I too am sorry to hear about your friend. Death is so hard to accept...a powerful, very intense poem. Your talent is definitely phenomenal. *Krista Knutson* I'm a slow dying flower In a frost-killing hour The sweet turning sour and untouchable... -Natalie Merchant |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Quite a detour from you normal sojourns, Martie..you can express any emotion with equal brilliance...my condolences to your friend... |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Please don't take this the wrong way. I sensed this was exactly as you told ME. That someone very close and important to you was dying. Now, this is the tricky part, not that I would wish anyone pain and anguish, but I truly hoped that was the case. Rather, dear, than for it to be a deep dark plot of revenge. The reader can feel that, too. That's what brings the shivers and the hope for a peace within you that will halt this going further. Well done in the intent of 'intensity'! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Friends--especially VAS ...my heart was full and I let it overflow in this poem...wishing my friend release from her pain...is a natural thing I think...no evil intent here...just powerful feelings. Thank you all for your sweet sincere replies...I appreciate your kindness and your hugs. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and when I touch your skin it is parchment and crackles like my soft finger is fire in the wound of you How spare life this rugged end and why must pain be last like a house so strong and sure you are covered with gasoline and who has the match to end the suffering of your scared walls the cellar drags me down and I can hear screaming screaming so soft that it blurs my questions for I want to ask you if you can see the other side where the sunset melts and yet your frailty cannot reach me with miracles and only down down I go into the black pit that holds my heart waiting for your sweet release ========================= you are such an amazing writer ... the raw and yes extreme intensity of the emotions are vividly felt as they were SO vividly written. heart string pulling work me sweet ... Im so sorry for your friends suffering ...and in turn yours for her, as well. love ya me |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Martie, I'm so moved by this write and Balladeer graciously said what came to my mind upon finishing this read "you can express any emotion with equal brilliance"... yup, there is much truth in his words PoetFriend Hugs2u |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
what an amazing ability you have to allow others to see within your heart and soul. It is indeed difficult in seeing the suffering ones for whom we love and care must endure. Take care my friend. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Like the empath in Startrek (original TV series) you seem to attract those in fragile terminal pain - for the best reason I know - Love - unstinting, undemanding total giving - that you can - without showing the effects - Convinces me that perhaps it is a God-given gift - whatever the reason - I'm grateful you can express yourself poetically so with such force and beauty, and believe God hears prayers. |
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