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A Private Unveiling |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869
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In the ambiance of a heartbeat a teardrop falls flowing like a crystal river down stream drowning within a pillow a pillow of satin dreams only the aura of teardrops may be seen how many teardrops doth linger in the dark as your hair cascades a pillow bleeding over satin white just like when you were a teen crying over Johnny.. king of the prom when Judy was the queen not knowing you would marry this prom queens dream an aura of teardrops frame the softness of your face under the veil of moonlight for your guardian angel to see an exhibit in the spotlight of the stars a gallery of broken promises in the institute of an affair that once was A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
I'm getting depressed, reading all these sad poems. Well, even though I'm down, I liked this...beautifully descriptive of pain. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
you know what they say..if you cant beat them ..join em  ..if i was a comedian it would be different  thanks for peeking in~Victoria~ < !signature--> A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) [This message has been edited by Victoria (edited 12-02-2000).] |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
In the ambiance of a heartbeat Victoria, From the start you set a mood, and then trail your passions across the page to strike our hearts. Nicely done! Robert Joseph |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
an exhibit in the spotlight of the stars a gallery of broken promises in the institute of an affair that once was so true ~V~ enjoyed this beauty  ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
thank you Robert and Wynter..for your lovely responses.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
In the ambiance of a heartbeat a teardrop falls flowing like a crystal river down stream drowning within a pillow a pillow of satin dreams only the aura of teardrops may be seen how many teardrops doth linger in the dark as your hair cascades a pillow bleeding over satin white =============== so pretty Victoria...so many lovely images wonderful writing ... bittersweet in its beauty take care jm I looked into the sky for my anthem The words and music came through But words and music can never touch the beauty that I've seen Looking into you |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Victoria....though this may be sad....it's awesome. You've penned this in a way that drew me right in and made me feel as if I were the one with the falling tears. Wonderful ~Sheri "The things that come to those that wait may be the things left by those who got there first" |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
thank you janet marie and sheri for your kind comments and..for taking time to read..glad you both enjoyed.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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