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Stopping Time
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Stopping Time |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware 
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Stopping Time In a passage in Anita Shreve’s book “The Weight of Water”, a photographer and a poet meet (and ultimately fall in love). He, the poet notes at their meeting that they both are in the same occupation: “trying to stop time” Hence this piece. This weekend past I flew to Monterrey California. Without pad, pen or computer on film I hope I captured a Greek Orthodox Confirmation, Christening and Wedding (renewal of vows). (My niece married a wonderful husband from a Greek family). The ceremonies were lengthy but beautiful and moving. While there I took my camera also to Cannery Row – and snapped the ‘tree lighting ceremony – and the children playing on a snow pile (many had never seen snow) imported for the occasion. Visited Carmel where small charming homes you’d think ought to cost $100-300k – sell for millions … at the beach saw crazy people actually in the freezing water, and a beautiful mermaid sculptured in the sand. Drove the 17 mile drive by Pacific Grove and immersed myself in the ‘feel’ of incredible surf on a beautiful sunny day and enjoyed seeing the Pacific display itself in colors from turquoise to black to white with such splendor words fail my pen. These are but a few of the things I hope to “stop time” with, using words I pray will poetically capture these events. Here’s the first: Stopping Time I’ll forever remember when time first stopped Your words of love upon me you dropped Breathless I was for my heart stopped too From that moment on my love for you grew In your words poetic I saw heaven rent The light of your eyes celestial sent Whispers we exchanged though shackled by life Dreams of loving ‘neath shutters deny our strife There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~Janet Mar |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I'm so glad to see you back, Bill...sounds like you had a lovely time...what were you doing out without a notebook??? Your poem is beautiful! |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
WY~ I think you did a great job of "stopping time" this is very pretty  -SEA |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This...is...wow...beautiful... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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bestgirl911 Senior Member
since 2000-10-04
Posts 551Clio, MI , United We Stand |
WY... "I'll forever remember when time first stopped, Your words of love upon me you dropped." this is just beautiful....how successful you were in stopping time...at least here in Open 11. Wonderful. Best |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Hi Ya Bill, these are few words for a write such as yours but I know with a little time you will find many more... thank you for the re: on "who's to gain" Like me I can see your a man of any hour... It's always nice to see you... drop me an "E" and let me know what your writing. Got to say... I loved the lines "I’ll forever remember when time first stopped... Your words of love upon me dropped... Breathless I was for my heart stopped..." nice nice work Bill. I might just snatch a little of your context... of course I'll run it by you first. Very nice Bill... dale wayne . |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Oh Bill, one other thing... I didn't get out of that wedding for at least three daz... I was toast for at least a week... How did you fare..? dale . [This message has been edited by lucky (edited 11-30-2000).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Great intro to a great poem..I liked the setup I've never read the book but it sure sounds interesting....Good write!! WY |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Lovely!! And it's interesting hearing of your trip. I look forward to the next treats from you.  |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
So beautiful...and yes time does stop when you first hear those words from the lips of the one you love... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
hey you..I missed ya... thank you for sharing those lovely images with us...for someone like me who has never traveled or experienced such wonderous places I must live vicarioulsy thru the imagery of poetry and photos... I look forward to the poetry your trip inspired in you... this lil gem is a jewel of your heart. there is nothig like the anticpation of the first realization of love... later-making-time-stand-still-gator  jm Sprayed across my heart and hers Danced butterflies in the wild This angel, this woman , who loves me with the innocence of a child. ~DeVante~ |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Im so glad you enjoyed your vacation bill..now you just have to wait for the jet lag to hit ha..always nice to get home and relax..welcome back my friend.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Welcome back, and you have done an good job with Stopping Time....loved to read it. Charisma |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Martie- I should know better huh? Thanks ~S~ SEA- If you 'saw' it perhaps I did - thank you ~S~ Sunshine- Wow? - Wow back atcha ~S~ thanks Karilea Best - Thanks - I try ~S~ Lucky- Feel free I borrowed a few words myself ~G~ no problem! thanks -Oh = and the total for all the ceremonies was 1 - 1 1/2 hr - not bad at all considering~G~ ethome- Anita writes poetic prose and always a great story I'd also recommend "Where or When" or "The Pilot's Wife" they're all great reads. Thanks. Sharon- Thanks I hope I can stay inspired. Paula- Words are but words time proves their worth - Thank you Janet Marie- Glad I pleased Dancing Butterfly Lady Victoria- Lag is over the trip was relaxing - just not the plane trip - too long - too much layover Thanks Charisma= Thank You~S~ |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Wil, Vow renewal - it makes me cry Your poetry - makes me *sigh* But one thing, I'll tell you Mac I'm so glad, so glad you're back. See my happy dance.  write on Kethry Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant - Thoreau |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Kethry - You don't have to dance for me - but I love it And you know I'm addicted to writing - and to this wonderful forum - so there will be more. Thank you. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Bill, this was so wonderful and so you. I look forward to the next excerpt. Hope you are faring well and I wish I had flown that far and saw the California coast, but Las Vegas was a first for me ( releasing me from this east coast) and I did get to meet one beautiful lady ~V~ there...geena..I think we can call her ~~softsmiles ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Wynter- Ah Ha - you saw the resemblance too - ~G~ I'm glad you had a fun trip - Mine was great as well - Nice to know to whom I'm replying ~G~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Wilfred~ This is stunning. What a beautiful trip you describe. Poetic photographs - wonderful to share. Thank you for this gift. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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