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A Lizard Dance
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A Lizard Dance |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I was worshipped, properly, every door was open... each breath was but a dream - divine - every wish, obeyed, unspoken. Lights grew bright at my command - they dimmed upon my very whim... I sought the solace, poet's hand, delighting in the ink of him. Each utterance I dared to make, was greeted with the eyes of love. And every one that I forsaked waved goodbye with velvet glove. Trust, sublime - the night was mine - I ruled, by queenly right. Lust of rhyme... word, serpentine, a shadow's romance of the light. By chance, I gazed into his eyes - By chance, I touched his hand. A lizard dance, to my surprise... A Goddess prayed to understand. A thaw, the melt, a puddle's ice, a silver tear of wisdom's prize... just a taste of breath of life that sank into a sigh of sand. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Uniquely entertaining...what imagery! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Lights grew bright at my command - they dimmed upon my very whim... I sought the solace, poet's hand, delighting in the ink of him. Each utterance I dared to make, was greeted with the eyes of love. And every one that I forsaked waved goodbye with velvet glove. Trust, sublime - the night was mine - I ruled, by queenly right. Lust of rhyme... word, serpentine, a shadow's romance of the light. ================== ooohh both me girlies posted at the same time...sublime for me  and oh my me twin...this is SOOOO COOOL never done a Lizzard dance..but I've kissed a few frogs...does that count? but seriously Sen...this is excellent .. the impact of those last lines...are poetry in motion... you are a goddess...of poetry. *kisskiss* (at your feet) *smile* later baby...gotta go find some frogs lol love ya me Sprayed across my heart and hers Danced butterflies in the wild This angel, this woman , who loves me with the innocence of a child. ~DeVante~ |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
A fine, fine piece. The words captivate and flow with vivid imaging! |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Serenity~ so creative! Wow! I love the way your words played in my mind, making me see wonderful images of a dance, a battle of wills........Fantastic!!  -SEA |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I love this one serenity. . . I can just see it now. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is powerful imagery. You've cast a spell with these words, frankly, I'm impressed!! What is that you express in your eyes? It seems to me more than all the words I have read in my life. Walt Whitman |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Serenity...till now I thought I could write about love, but you put me in my proper place, I've met the master. Beautiful, my friend. jwesley |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
serenity, we got lots of lizards down here...Come dance!!!  |
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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
Heya S'ren, I don't so much know about lizards dancing myself. I tried to teach a Bearded Dragon once, and an Iguana, but they weren't having any. My girlfriend's cat, however, will dance for footrubs. And my best friend's four huskies slow dance if you're nice to their paws. I'm gonna have to agree about that last stanza being the epitomy of poetry. I liked it so much. The rest didn't quite have the same effect on me, but man put it all together, and waBOW! Excellent work! -me |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Oh my!! This is superb! One of your best (aren't they all though?). Submit this one!! At least to the main site, please!!! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Karilea, as always, I thank you much and I do appreciate your reading! JM--that frog thing? VERY SELDOM WORKS. Unless a frog can answer some very specific questions? DON'T TRY. lol...and many hugs to you...e ya later! Love you. VAS? I thank you much! SEA--You are fantastic! Sven? Hugs to you, and thank you so much for being a faithful reader and friend. Kathleen...I find your work equally captivating. j...what a sweet and generous reply...and coming from you? very much a compliment! I thank you!!! B'deer...I thank you much my friend! (and I think I found the theme for another poem in your reply...hehehe) Philip--hey...I dance for footrubs too...thank you sweets!!! I'll e YOU later too. sharon...you are probably the only one to fully understand this one, but then, you do know the whole story...lol...and it only hurts when I dance...grin. And I will submit this one, if you tell me what category! Thanks to all, I'm off to read! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
This is very well written Serenity and I was captivated by all those metaphorical images and great adjectives....Good job Celeste!! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
ethome? Thanks so much, yer just lovely!!! and yanno? I LIKE being called celeste...winks, and grin me friend!!! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
My dearest "Official" friend; this is so lovely in not only it's imagery but in it's uniqueness that could only come from our serenity. Truely amazing what your pen and your muse can come up with. Loved it much. A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses. author unknown |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Putting this in my library...gonna use it in the newsletter!  |
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