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No Man's Land
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No Man's Land |
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Tony Abbot Member
since 2000-11-18
Posts 209North Wales,UK |
Alone,alone,all walk through no man's land, Though the wise know this is our darkest night, No more important than a grain of sand. The skein of time unwinds,too slow to stand, Hope clasped to the heart,like the widow's mite. Alone,alone,all walk through no man's land. As empty lives fall short of what was planned, All look to the sky, though it deems their plight No more important than a grain of sand. Justice hides,under fate's despotic hand, Blind to the caitiff and the cenobite, Alone,alone all walk through no man's land. As if from heaven's gates,forever banned, We wander lost,to deem what's wrong and right No more important than a grain of sand. While many are trying to understand, Some just pray there are better days in sight, No more important than a grain of sand, Alone, alone all walk through no man's land. < !signature--> 'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot [This message has been edited by Tony Abbot (edited 11-26-2000).] |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
This poem had almost a hopelessness to it. Your words sang the message you have tried to convey. Sad this world is when we think we walk the path of life alone. I take heart in believing I do not walk alone but still my heart breaks for those who think they do. You have a wonderful talent, my friend and I totally enjoyed experiencing it. Thank you so much for this read. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. [URL=http://path2riches.com]http://path2riches.com |
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Tony Abbot Member
since 2000-11-18
Posts 209North Wales,UK |
Thanks,Startime.This poem is about the decline of religion and the isolation some are feeling in an increasingly secularised society.There is hope,with the line,'the wise know this is our darkest night'.This is a villanelle. 'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
This is an excellent Villanelle and speaks a strong statement. It's very well crafted. Nicely done. Poeminister "...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." -Poe |
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Tony Abbot Member
since 2000-11-18
Posts 209North Wales,UK |
Thanks for replying,Poeminister. 'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very nicely done, Tony! Denise |
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Tony Abbot Member
since 2000-11-18
Posts 209North Wales,UK |
Thanks,Denise.Appreciated. 'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Villanelles are nor easy, this one succeeds beautifully Tony  |
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Tony Abbot Member
since 2000-11-18
Posts 209North Wales,UK |
Thank you Beki.Glad you liked it. 'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
nicely written Tony..i have only written one of these forms...not easy to do...enjoyed ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
the kindest prayer then, that no one walk alone, unless by choice... well done Tony... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Tony Abbot Member
since 2000-11-18
Posts 209North Wales,UK |
Thank you both for replying. 'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot |
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