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Tapered Candle Melted
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Tapered Candle Melted I have notice how fall has taken the liquid amber and torched its leaves with fire when last year’s vision nestled around summer and would not let go of its vibrant hold on green until winter dripped its way across the lawn and fell into a perfect cloudy day Now the caprice of change has insisted that I notice the scarlet vista opening and it takes me down into its soft beguile in yellowed crunch to lay in feathered leaves and scan the stripes across the sky that fly me fly me into dirt that seeps cold clods of truth Sun me still I ask the sky for lack takes this whistle to crying ‘til the earth whispers just let it be this day will pass and this sky will blue again and you my sister will sing still So fall has taken the liquid amber and dormant comes upon the grass and the rose cranes its long thistle stem around the trellis seeking light then opening still in lavender abandon and I wonder if it is too late to capture this exquisite moment to late to capture fall weaving brushfulls of last minutes into the shade where the table sits with two chairs side by side and a tapered candle melted. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I have notice how fall has taken the liquid amber and torched its leaves with fire when last year’s vision nestled around summer and would not let go of its vibrant hold on green until winter dripped its way across the lawn and fell into a perfect cloudy day Now the caprice of change has insisted that I notice the scarlet vista opening and it takes me down into its soft beguile in yellowed crunch to lay in feathered leaves and scan the stripes across the sky that fly me fly me into dirt that seeps cold clods of truth ==================== So fall has taken the liquid amber and dormant comes upon the grass and the rose cranes its long thistle stem around the trellis seeking light then opening still in lavender abandon and I wonder if it is too late to capture this exquisite moment to late to capture fall weaving brushfulls of last minutes into the shade where the table sits with two chairs side by side and a tapered candle melted. ==================== "and I wonder if it is too late to capture this exquisite moment to late to capture fall weaving brushfulls of last minutes into the shade" you have answered your own question with this amazing amazing poem ...... I am sitting here shaking my head ... how do you do this time and time again so damn consistantly well.... the imagery here is exquisite Martie ... the way your eyes invision the world about you.. and if I have to walk there on my lips... I gotta see that back yard of yours .. cause mine just has leaves on the ground and a couple of lawn chairs   take a bow for this one sweets... (and I will be reading your offering I just found in prose when I can give it the attention I wish to.. to take in every word) |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Martie, I'm gonna rename you Mother Nature becaus you have written so many poems concerning nature and the changing of the seasons and every one is better than the one before....and so it continues ; |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
You always capture exquisite moments with your pen, Martie! Very beautiful!! Denise |
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BSC
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Simply beautiful images Martie, brushed so perfectly with your words. Bonnie |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I must agree with Poets Marie, 'Deer, Denise and Bonnie...you brush your scenes so beautifully... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet--you always clap so loud, how could I not take a bow? Balladeer--Mother nature, hmmm, that would make me how old? Thanks deer, you're sweet! Denise--Thanks hon for the beautiful. Hi Bonnie--so glad to see you! Thanks Karilea for being such an agreeable person  |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Martie... Martie... Martie... what an absolutely stunning, exquisite poem you have graced us with this fine autumn morning. |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Exquisite Martie! Wonderfully descriptive with such vivid images. This sets such a tranquil and peaceful mood ... just lovely! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
Martie Yet another beautiful lyric poem centred around natural images - one day i shall write something similar, and i'll be pleased if it's even half as evocative as your words lovely my friend P |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
You may not be mother nature but you sure as heck could sit in for her. (NO, not because of the age thing silly, because your wonderful ways of painting such lovely verses for us all to share.) I have sorely missed reading your poetry as much as I have been gone lately and I am hoping and trying to get settled down some so that I can once again go to sleep with your words last in my minds eye. As it is now, I can only refer the ones of yours I have printed to read over but that is okay because not one of them has lost any of their beauty. If any thing, they all get more beautiful with each read. Sort of makes them vintage now doesn't it? Lovely write my sweet cherished friend. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi Mike--I'm always so glad when you reply, you know...thanks! Kit--Thank you for enjoying the mood of this poem...I appreciate your lovely response. Philip--I think one day you will be a great poet...I think you already are. Mark--you do make me smile, cowboy...how did you learn how to do that? Hugs to you! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Your words always make me appreciate Nature so much more Martie Thank you! Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
"how fall has taken the liquid amber and torched its leaves with fire" Many exquisite lines here but none to surpass these = I'm truly envious - you are sooo very good - this is a perfect treasure |
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