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I Walk Alone
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I Walk Alone |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
I walk alone, as I traverse, Stone walk well worn, by feet unknown, Annointed not, I seek asperse, As to the gods, my sins atone. I walk beyond, what is not there, Mountains flattened, wide rivers dry, No star to guide, no luminaire, As seek my soul, to purify. In solitude, an angry waste, No tears befall, a savage breast, I walk alone; walk Janus-faced, In silence mourn, by beast possessed. No last refrain, no final song, I walk alone, for I was wrong. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
My goodness! This is different, not what I expected but oh so good!! Loved the last two lines very much!  |
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Tony Abbot Member
since 2000-11-18
Posts 209North Wales,UK |
Marvellous.This is the best poem I've seen on this site ,so far. 'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot |
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BirdeeB Member
since 2000-09-16
Posts 106USA |
Very Intense I liked it alot Great work BirdeeB |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mike--Outstanding poetry from you, my friend...it always is! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This speaks loudly...bravely...it is so hard to say we were wrong... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this is a very different piece of work than we are used to seeing from you ... but as always..your gift of cadence and rhyme is apparent, as is your depth of emotion. another superb penning from you take care jm |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Ms. deVine... I have been called different before... been called worse...*smile* glad you enjoyed. Tony Abbot...appreciate the gracious reply... thank you. BirdeeB... thank you for reading a replying... Martie... yep...I was out standing earlier... but got cold so I came inside... thank you my friend. Sunshine...thank you for reading and enjoying my poetry. JanetMarie...have a few different ones hidden in the forums...*smile* glad you liked. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Mike* You dip your quill so deeply into emotions when you write...they can't help but become part of the reader. This was a great piece...the sadness and despair were felt and it had the feeling of a slow uphill walk carrying the burden of guilt upon one's shoulders...the heaviest load of all. Excellent writing!! You cannot dance in the sun until you have cried in the rain~ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Perfectly penned, as always, Mike!! Denise |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This moved me a lot...reminded me of my late night "creepies" that taunt me into insomnia...a different read from you---but I did much enjoy...thank you for sharing the darker ink of your pen. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Your poem was packed with incredible emotions which my emotions responded to. No last refrain, no final song, I walk alone, for I was wrong. These final lines came with power into my heart for I have felt this way also. Thank you so much for the read. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. [URL=http://path2riches.com]http://path2riches.com |
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