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Surf Ballet -- though I need opinion on title
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Surf Ballet -- though I need opinion on title |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Surf Ballet Virginia Salter profound joy trickles down my cheeks as your tender caresses tickle ears and shoulders as fingers speak of love, caring, romance gently downward past my elbows you grasp my waist as we sway to our own interlude waves flow willows weave a mystery of delight in the distance gull squeaks terns swoop fish rises cascading droplets sparkle in sunlight I feel strength of sinew on my fingertips the warmth of your body rises as if caressing my soul thunder rumbles lightning crashes tide splashes my ankles swirling ties around our feet draw us nigh nigh to sensual promises dreams © November 9, 2000 |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Lovely poem. Very sensual and romantic...I think the title fits it much. Nicely written. Poeminister "...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." -Poe |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Thank you, poeminster, for your lovely comment and opinion on the title. The subject of this piece is a rare one for me, but it truly is to be a dance on the shore. |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Many thoughts came to mind as I read this. One of them I can not mention in Open.... But I thought of actually surfing the seas, and of course one of my all time favorite sports...Wakeboarding!  I really enjoyed reading this and seeing all the possibilities of interpretation. Enjoyed~Sheri "The things that come to those that wait may be the things left by those who got there first" |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I think the title's as beautiful as this wonderful love poem...sensual beautiful scene of love and tenderness.....ethome |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I think "Dancing on the Shore" adds to the mystery and sensuality of this poem...enjoyed reading this and your title is excellent...James |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Surf ballet...love the title..lovely as is the whole poem.. nicely written~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Thank you all for your lovely, reassuring comments! I had had a different title on this and didn't think it worked. I'm glad this one does. |
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