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Cleansing Day
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Cleansing Day |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Cleansing Day oddly, today is the day I shall clean ~ my mental house ~ ~ my feeling heart ~ ~ my memory banks ~ in my mental house truth and realization beckon me to white dreams and to lay aside the black of being sorry and sorrows of what happenings weren't to happen, and what was not to be do not set aside just one day to atone for the sins of wants and needs and desires… you know the ones I mean… the ones you shouldn't take that don't belong to you instead go toward the bluish light of white, that which you can aspire to, in grace and ritual and aspiration of right… should a hand reach out to take mine…in comfort or in company…(whether it's giving or receiving) it is ok to accept it for the moment to remember to give it back to those who own it my feeling heart has lent itself to maligning times and propitious twinklings ~ breaking (hearts break) only as brakes were applied to moments of rejection and fallacies, over good gone bad and bad just going gone and I have gained in the losses and expedited rejection toward better moments, where my heart could mend then wend its way toward others in an effort to walk them through this hall of quaking (hearts quake) just so we could get to the other side… and I have traveled it alone many a time… so why does trepidation make my heart beat (hearts beat) faster even when I know I need not fear fear… now to dust away the cobs and webs from my memory banks… oh sometime so leaden with memories until a key unlatches just the right bank and gold spills forth in memories and sounds and smells and feels and that rush of life… so this is the most precious of the cleaning, that which to discard, which to keep and like old magnetic tapes that are bent and LP's that have a scratch, I examine each and every one that comes to the surface with this cleaning just to make sure there is no hope for resurrecting any of that particular memory… ah but those that make me feel so good… those I keep in soft folds of comfort and warmth I keep them in smells of Old Spice and Canoe, Tabu and Chanel… and baking bread on a Monday morning I keep them wrapped in rays of golden sunlight playing halos in a child's hair, I keep them in your wide open eyes, with butterflies laughter carrying them away to the safest memory bank I have… and for safekeeping, I polish the key with some spit and shine and place it safely in my heart till needed next, then write myself a note and place THAT in my mental house so that I might find it from time to time, (Reminder to KJ - clean house) so that whenever anything other than a cleaning is required, like a friend who needs me, then I might find and share these moments with you in a clean house. 01.08.01 Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Stan Member
since 2001-01-01
Posts 120Inland Empire Southern California |
Karilea, This is charming! What a delightful imagination you have to think of this metephor and express it so well! Thanks. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Oh Karilea--I just love this...I even wrote a similar poem some years ago called Housecleaning..but I didn't write it nearly as well as you have here. Shine on! |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Stan, thank you. I certainly hope you are enjoying your time here at Passions...so much to read...so little time... Martie...post yours! I always love to read you!...and thanks for peeking in!... |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Kari, another amazing write from you. I can barely pick out a favorite part, but this one stanza hit me the hardest.. (you won't be surprised) "my feeling heart has lent itself to maligning times and propitious twinklings ~ breaking (hearts break) only as brakes were applied to moments of rejection and fallacies, over good gone bad and bad just going gone" You are such a deep thinking, talented woman, I wonder how anyone could have ever broken your heart.. But then, without the breaks, we wouldn't appreciate the rest, so they say anyway. Loved this LOTS Sandra |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ What a sparkling gem you have written here. It is Top-Of-The-Charts on the jukebox I keep of you ! 'and I have gained in the losses and expedited rejection toward better moments, where my heart could mend then wend its way toward others in an effort to walk them through this hall of quaking' *Hugs*, my friend for this has written itself on my heart. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Cat...someday perhaps....I'll be the female counterpart to Rod McKuen, y'think? I'm so glad you found something in this to like separate from the rest...and I do so appreciate your comments... Marge...you can keep me on your jukebox anytime....it just tickles me so much that a lady of your calibre in writing would read mine so often! Hugs to you...thank you for everything.... |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari love, do you need me to tell you this is superb, well you might not need me to tell you, but it's true nevertheless. Absolutely first rate love. I really love this concept, a mental house clean, absolutely brilliant love. And such a wonderful piece from you as always. 'Viva La Belle Sol' Take care Majestic Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
hey karilea- when you get finished cleaning yours, come on over to my place! you sound much better at this than me and i could use some help!.... lol.... great writing, missy  |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
excellent my friend. . . we should all have these. . . at least once a month. . .  ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Marsha, take a bow...you are one of them who helped to inspire this...thank you!... doreen, actually, with the REAL thing? I hire out! LOL...probably because I'm spending too much time on the mental cleaning as is! Such a little pack rat I am...LOL...thanks!... Sven...hire out...it's cheaper....thanks! |
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