Edelweiss ...flower of purity (a sonnet)

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Stan
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0 posted 2001-01-07 12:44 PM

Edelweiss  ...flower of purity

What rare and noble means to gain success,
  are fetching lures and fascinating spells,
    and precious charms we all at birth possess
      with outstretched arms that all delight compels.

But in our youth we learn survival ways,
  when taught by some who fear the world they face,
    when parents overly or under-praise,
      when trusted models do not lose with grace,

When peers and siblings fight in grand charade,
  'til in reaction, ...all that native charm,
    that gift that could so easily persuade
      is buried deep protecting it from harm.

We play the game and pay a thousand price,
...or grow to rediscover Edelweiss.

Sunshine

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1 posted 2001-01-07 07:43 AM

I know when I first heard Edelweiss so many decades ago...the delicacy of the song alone makes one strive to be soft and pure...and strong and everlasting...

Stan, thank you for this, and thank you for provoking a memory!

Stan
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2 posted 2001-01-07 07:59 AM

And thank you for bringing some "Sunshine" into my day. I love this little poem. It's another case where I gripped the muse and forced her to give it up.

Sunshine

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3 posted 2001-01-07 08:04 AM

You gripped your muse!? Ah, that is the sound that led me to this! Now, release her...and share her...for she did you quite well by this one!

Stan
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4 posted 2001-01-07 08:13 AM

Karilea!  New to meetcha!

Thank you nice person.  I have read some of your poems such as "the envelope" and I think you get your share of time at the Muse's nipple.  (oops, was that naughty?)

Your reference to the song made me think.
Mark B had some good guitar music background on one of his poems.  I would like to learn how that is done and have the song Edelweiss be in the background for this poem. Thanks for the idea.

serenity blaze
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5 posted 2001-01-07 08:27 AM

Stan---you precious thing and talented poet!!!

You are an amazing man---have to share here---not only was I working on a sonnet..but also Shakespearian...grin...we are...dang it, don't know how to spell it? but "sympatico?" (faking it, there...)

Love and Hugs, and if there was a "new member of the month/year/etc.?" You're it!!!

serenity blaze
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6 posted 2001-01-07 08:31 AM

Stan---you precious thing and talented poet!!!

You are an amazing man---have to share here---not only was I working on a sonnet..but also Shakespearian...grin...we are...dang it, don't know how to spell it? but "sympatico?" (faking it, there...)

Love and Hugs, and if there was a "new member of the month/year/etc.?" You're it!!!

Nate Dogg
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7 posted 2001-01-07 08:37 AM

I agree with all the lovely sentiments from above cause, this is truly a great write...shoot, you make me wanna write a sonnet!

Nathan

Irish Rose
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8 posted 2001-01-07 08:41 AM

This is outstanding poetry. Bravo!!

Shades of "Sound of Music" and everything else. The form and stucture did me proud.
Congratulations on a great sonnet!< !signature-->

"Every man dies.
Not every man truly lives."
Braveheart

Kathleen

[This message has been edited by Irish Rose (edited 01-07-2001).]

Stan
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9 posted 2001-01-07 01:34 PM

Karen, Thanks for the "Sympatico"

Nate, Glad to meet you. Thanks. Try the sonnet. The template makes you think and challenges you to put things well.

Rose, From you, that's a high compliment! Thanks.

Sven

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10 posted 2001-01-07 01:57 PM

"gripping the muse" eh??

I love that idea!! And this poem. . .and of course, Sunshine beat me to the Edelweiss reference, but I'll be singing it all day now. . .

wonderful. . .

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Charisma

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11 posted 2001-01-07 02:03 PM

yes I know the song too, lovely one...........and your words are singing in this excellent penned piece.
looking forward for more.

((hugs))
Charisma

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