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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace 
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I am I am liquid, or so I am told Can't quite decide who is me I wonder if I'll ever fit the mold Emotions more like potpourri I hear tarnish on a heart of gold Love comes with no guaranty I see my future written out in bold All the mistakes lit the marquee I want back a soul once sold My heart races wild and free I am liquid, or so I am told Can't quite decide who is me I pretend I understand my form Changing with all I see I feel only touch can make you warm Yet, too warm in steam I flee I touch emotions start to swarm Love can bring such jubilee I worry within my heart so torn Alone my heart an amputee I cry then become a ragging storm Holding back now is no luxury I am liquid, or so I am told Can't quite decide who is me I understand how love grows cold Never heart break to foresee I say I have love…behold Voided heart filled with glee I dream love within paroled Ever to adore is my decree I try my heart not to scold With giving in or letting go the key I hope again my arms will hold The risk of love to be I am liquid, or so I am told Can't quite decide who is me [This message has been edited by 1slick_lady (edited 01-06-2001).] |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Different format, nice you have done a beautiful job Rich |
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Stan Member
since 2001-01-01
Posts 120Inland Empire Southern California |
Hello nice lady, You have eloquently voiced an age old lament. But remember that the past is gone forever and neither mistakes nor failures have ever diminished your worth. No one's perfect and you have every right to concentrate on the last part where you look for a new love. And good fortune be your beacon. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I like this much....I like how you took the format? and let your heart take over...exactly what it's all about...see? You ARE liquid, warm and free...AND ? there is nothing, but nothing more powerful than a rush of water...speaking from someone below sea level of course, lol...well done... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wonderful answer to the challange! Great writing...you may not be really liquid but your poetry flows with well chosen words that stream down the page...good stuff! |
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maxtec1 Senior Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 577Garland, Tx |
very good dear friend. I enjoyed the read and can relat to many of your words. love and light, Richard |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Well, another piece I like by you. I must be missing all the good poems coming in these days. Just love this write. Parker |
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