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Tears In The Rain
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Tears In The Rain |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida 
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Tears In The Rain Pain, an arrow in the heart twisted and turned once more, I choke Tears, on the edge holding back don't want to break too much to take Rejected, unworthy of love non person is that all I am? Prove, want love? work for it, earn it, then maybe... Reaching, grasping for something wrong words chosen, hearts nearly frozen Walls, surround me, no more rain, shield me from all this Trying, never enough no matter what Second best, that's what the sign says written all over your face Dream, just dream, that's all there is I choose to live, somewhere over the rainbow I see BloomingRose |
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Quiet One Junior Member
since 2001-01-01
Posts 46Shhhhh |
We never seem to feel like #1 in our own heart, there always seems to be a foot of some sort, holding us down nicely written |
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Agust P Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 157 |
its all about feelings, I loved it! thank you, AP |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I know that you know where you will never feel second best because you showed me yourself. Do you remember? You my friend will never fall into that category in anything you do because you put your heart into all that you do. This was a wonderful write expressing those moments when we tend to just let the frustration out right before going out and conquering the world. Beautifully written and presented. |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Quiet One~ Sometimes it seems there is a foot trying to smash, but I somehow always get back up. Thanks for reading. AP~ I am glad there is a place to come that we can write down our feelings, bad or good, because we all have times in our life when we go through rough waters. Thank you. Mark~ Thanks for giving me a boost. You have a good heart my friend. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Everybody cries some tears in the rain from time to time....that doesn't make anyone second best or first best or third best...it makes you as human as I am and as human as you have written this poem. You know that hurt causes us to doubt ourself sometimes but it never lasts it really doesn't. We are the same you and I and a few words of tender love directed right at your heart and all of a sudden you've forgotten all of the previous hurt....true love really is an ongoing thing isn't it? sweet poem and so are you... ethome |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Bloom I wish you could hear the beautiful version of "Somewhere Over the Rainbow" as sung by the Hawaiian singer Israel Kamakawiwo'ole. I love it every time I hear it...gives me lots of hope for the beauty of life...James |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Dream, just dream, that's all there is I choose to live, somewhere over the rainbow I see However is judging you is judging you under the wrong terms, for one you are a very talented poet and two you are yourself, completely unique to anyone else. If that person can not see that then they are a fool. You are no 1. Take care, excellent write. There's a feeling of contentment Now that you are here I feel satisfied I belong inside Your velvet heaven" Depeche mode |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
ethome~ True what you say, we doubt ourself when words fling, but carry on because we must. I thank you for your encouragement. James~ I would like to hear that version of, over the rainbow...maybe I can find it. thank you. Brian~ Thank you, you are kind to say those things. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Blooming Rose, You will never be second best here. May you reach the rainbow that you strive for always. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
I agree with all above me...and even that I recognize those feelings ....there will be always one you.... and someday you will reach your rainbow.... Take care (((warm hugs)) Charisma |
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