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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
A wintry river of miserable gray flows between frozen banks behind my house I stand at the edge watching as ducks float by bobbing on feathered bottoms surrounded by ice chunks Drifting off to nowhere silhouetted only by barren orchard trees and me… I touch the waters with my boot submerging my toe in the icy current My flesh dimples as I watch the ducks disappear around the bend and I long to be with them Skimming along frozen stones A nonentity veiled by icy waters unburdened by life I want to relinquish my place and become lost within swirling currents interlaced with tiny bubbles and poignant shadows I want to float here and feel nothing I want to flow endlessly.. I love the time and in between the calm inside me in the space where I can breathe... Sarah McLachlan [This message has been edited by Breathe~ (edited 12-19-2000).] |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this puts vivid images in my mind.......I like that!  Great writing -SEA |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
"I want to flow endlessly. . ." Tell me how. . . Great poem. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
before I float, I need to fly...this is lovely, took me right to my pasture in this chill winter evening...saw the whole thing, but want to see it again tomorrow... BTW...I like your nickname... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Breathe~ Please tell me how if you figure it out. Sounds wonderful . . . floating free . . . Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
Thank you SEA..I can still feel the chill.., Sven..When I have it figured out myself...I'll let you know...Thanks.. Thank you Sunshine...I like yours too...Gives me a warm feeling on this cold cold night... Lone Wolf...your name reminds me of long ago friend... ...I say we ask the ducks...freedom is always a lovely, coveted thing...Thank you... I love the time and in between the calm inside me in the space where I can breathe... Sarah McLachlan |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
so it is you  I am glad to see you here..~Wynter (M/M_ "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Enjoyed reading Breathe..lovely images ~Victoria~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you paint an awesome picture! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
I want to float here and feel nothing I want to flow endlessly.. I know this desire well, if you ever manage to flow endlessly could you tell me how, or at least give me a hint. REally enjoyed the poem, well written, wonderful images. "In the shadowplay, acting out your own death, knowing no more As the assassins all grouped in four lines, dancing on the floor" Joy division |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
nakdthoughts...Yep! Tis me... Nice to see you too...Thank you Victoria... passing shadows...I love your nick name.. brian madden...I believe "flowing endlessly" is a state of mind I have yet to achieve...but I have my fingers crossed... Thank you... I love the time and in between the calm inside me in the space where I can breathe... Sarah McLachlan |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
"I want to relinquish my place and become lost within swirling currents interlaced with tiny bubbles and poignant shadows I want to float here and feel nothing I want to flow endlessly.." --what an absolutely perfect and fabulous ending...a powerful, somewhat sad piece of work, I really enjoyed it! *Krista Knutson* "One can never consent to creep when one feels an impulse to soar." Helen Keller |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Flowing endlessly......what a wonderful thought...if you find the secret let me know. *w* Thanks for such a lovely read. *s* On the wings of words our spirits fly, and our souls are free. ~me~ |
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