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When a Whisper is Loud
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When a Whisper is Loud |
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Sunshine
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 When a Whisper is Loud he called out long time coming calling out looking for home called out long continued to roam he called out and was always alone in the alone time he decided he didn't need anyone in the alone time he thought, "I shall never be undone!" but… he called out looked hither and yon he kept calling from dusk till dawn always calling from morn till night somehow couldn't get it right in the alone time he decided he didn't need anyone in the alone time he thought, "I shall never be undone!" but… it was then when he decided to whisper just the once he said the words soft and tender hardly rendered and she whispered back "I heard" and this small act this consequence left him speechless and quite spent he wondered aloud how could it be so she quietly said to he "but it was when you whispered to me" Dumbfounded he was mute his voice and he was left with little choice for all his life he had searched and called and here it was his back to the wall for she had appeared as dreams sometimes do she became real he could hear and he could feel and touch and see and wonder there at when all the while she quietly sat and whispered "I love you" and then he knew and was undone and smiled Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Such a soft beautiful message...James |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari, WOW this is utterly truly wonderful. This soars, how wonderful that you can write such beauty, and gift us with your words. You are really glowing love, honestly this is brilliant.   Take care Majestic Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Sunshine
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Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
James, I like soft too...thank you... Marsha...you my little one, are the inspiration behind this, sending me off to Greek Myth and all...spent half of last night reveling in research...you have opened the door my dear...found a wonderful site from which to be inspired...thank you... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Björn Junior Member
since 2000-02-08
Posts 23Münster, Germany |
it was then when he decided to whisper just the once he said the words soft and tender hardly rendered and she whispered back "I heard" This is really beautyful... it is too often that we blaze away like a searchlight, with no chance to see the small but beautyful warm light of a candle... Thanks for this one! Björn |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Bjorn, it is I who thank you for coming in with a small light...and sharing... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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athena4 Senior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 622 |
Sunshine, This one made me cry. How beautiful the imagery, how serene the whispers. Just captivating. Can't wait to read more! Elise |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari, glad you found it, now you know why I think of you as Persephone, beautiful, very clever and the harbringer of spring. I did tell you I went to a very weird school didn't I. This really is a fabulous write from you love, utterly wonderful. (And isn't that just like me to keep you up half the night too. Take care kid Majestic Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
this is sooooo wonderful penned....love it. ((hugs))) Charisma |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Lovely concepts, images here. To hear a whisper from the heart, a beautiful thing. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea--You know that poetic envy that JM is always talking about...I have a serious case of it, thanks to this poem...it is awesome!! |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
top of my list of Sunshine Poems I will treasure |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
pssst! can you hear me? i'm whispering... |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
sssssshhhhhhhhhhhhhnot supposed to say that L word outloud!!! lol... great write, karilea... VERY well penned! |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
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Athena, with a name like yours, I had hoped you would enjoy...thank you... Marsha, you're driving me to poetry heaven with all of your marvelous ideas...keep pouring them out, I'll research and create...you're such a treasure and you're mine, all mine...hands off, everyone else!...O...wait, I forgot...first rule of Passions is to share our muses...sigh ok... Thank you Charisma and Virginia, thank you... Martie...from you...this is a compliment to wear proudly....I thank you my poet friend... Mr. Yeats, I hope someday you take it out and it still shines....thank you.... 'Deer, what'd you say? I've got my tri-focals around here somewhere...let me see, what now was it you said....I don't think I can hear you...{~,^}...LOL...thank you! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Sunshine
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Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Doreen! You snuck in on me....LOL....[ok...I'll be quiet now.....shhhhh.....]and thank you little one.... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Sunshine~  I relate to so much of this......this is such a soft whisper.......love it!!  -SEA |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
sigh..this could not be any more romantic.. Sandra |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
SEA...you always make me think that I have written this just for you...and that, my dear, is a talent... Cat...I am so glad you liked this...thank you for coming in to read... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
That whisper will be carried on the winds forever my friend. This was a lovely piece from you and sure to make any man come undone. A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses. author unknown |
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Sunshine
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Mark, thank you for such a charming comment...but as always, these are just words strung along...although I do enjoy them myself...thank you... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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