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Whiling away. repost from OPEN 9 or 10
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Whiling away. repost from OPEN 9 or 10 |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland 
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Here I sit and often stand, following that day I was spewed from the mother carriage. Well I popped out screaming "take me back I demand!" but they just cut the anchor and let me float out along the tracks resting there in a jam, to wait out the delay between stops; that elongated jump from womb to tomb. Now I wonder should I take time to dance out in the mortal coil, to consume and feed the evanescent flames and in the charred lingering dusk plant my fake creation for end conquest? Sure my friend, it isn't all storms some rainbows have fallen upon my path. I got the Heavens for repose, hunger starves in earthen murmurs as I gaze on the jewel of woman. I lament for moths, as I do for the people falling idly into the path of destructive trains and evaporating in the pits, that is why I stay behind the yellow line, never daring to venture off the platform. From this vantage events unfold as a tapestry of sun, everything is all up in the air where my feet would chose to walk. No destination or key frame in hand, inspecting with dried eyes and shut mouth: this cavity makes a fine nest, it swallows me whole, dragging me deeper, it does seem that even in static there is motion. For though I dare not advance I can not hold fort in one place. Something drags me deeper within, down my rabbit hole Recessing, Recessing more… I think I have missed my connection…. So I find a bench and huddle with the other grey commuters. Swallow my numb pill and while away cultivating courage to get upon the next train and reach my final destination. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Brian, we see far too little of you...so either repost or write...either way, come in more often to share yourself with all of us... P.S. ~ I still like this one... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Sure my friend, it isn't all storms some rainbows have fallen upon my path. I got the Heavens for repose, hunger starves in earthen murmurs as I gaze on the jewel of woman. I lament for moths, as I do for the people falling idly into the path of destructive trains and evaporating in the pits, that is why I stay behind the yellow line, never daring to venture off the platform. From this vantage events unfold as a tapestry of sun, everything is all up in the air where my feet would chose to walk. ================= ahhhh...I feel much better now.. got me a Bri-gator fixx  HEY YOU! yes.. been WAY too long since you name has graced these pages... (yeah I know...reality bites)  always saving your spot ... stop in when ya can. love to ya eve Some people find subtlety in strangers if you find anything~let me in Your eyes~you see everything my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I remember this one! So good to see you, Brian.... "Always be a first rate version of your self instead of a second rate version of someone else." Marilyn Monroe |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Karilea, college has being keeping me from you guys..  but I am on Christmas holidays... so hopefully I will be able to catch up and get some writing done. Thanks for your reply. Missed you as well.  Eve/Jan,thanks for keeping that spot warm, I will stay as long as I can. Thanks. Kathleen, thanks. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Post more soon Brian...I love watching your mind spin through these pieces... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Brian...hey its so good to se you again...this is great...please dont stay away so long |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Brian I haven't read anything by you for a long time and I remember why I loved your work so much now.....most people don't sit and while away quite as complex as you do but then you just wouldn't be you if you didn't .....great work Brian!! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Karilea, I don't know it train stations are the best place to let my mind spin in, but if I do the result is the above poem. I might try some new places to let my mind run rampant. Thanks for your wonderful reply. Paula, I will try not to.. see if my tutors will go easy on me so I can spend more time at the site. Thanks for reading and replying. ethome, maybe my secret is that I have a lot of time on my hands. lol kidding. THanks for your reply. I am blushing, thanks. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Brian, sometimes life can be scary as hell. No wonder we sometimes prefer, nay, require numbness as a survival technique. Captured that fear of life so very well. Corinne |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* this is so complex and so simple all at the same time, I loved reading it. Wonderful writing. I look forward to more from your pen. Much love to you from me. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. http://path2riches.com |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Corinne, sometimes I wish I had those numb pills, but pain is a small price to pay in order to feel alive. thanks for your reply. Startime, thank you for very generous comments. returning love and smiles. "In the shadowplay, acting out your own death, knowing no more As the assassins all grouped in four lines, dancing on the floor" Joy division |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Hey you! Get to posting more soon...I need a little "madden"-ing in my life! |
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