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. . . Tanka . . . first attempt |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Never a Tanka just wrote a Haiku or two and a Senryu never knew they existed so I just had to try one Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
and I think you almost succeeded...wonderful try...[unless Senryu has three syllables?] Now pleasure us with some more... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Sunshine~ In Japanese it is pronounced Sen-ree-you, therefore, three syllables  For instance, the Japanese home islands are the Ryuku islands. Ryuku is pronounced Ree-uke-you Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
InterLoper~ Absolute perfection on the first attempt - now where will you go ???? This is truly a wonderful one. You are in tune with the art. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Then I stand corrected, and it's perfect...and once again, I tuck a new bit of knowledge under my erstwhile belt and head forth, creating new poetry, for a want of new rhyming scheme... thank you kind person! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
To Haiku or not, It’s just proper form or not, If done, then you’ve got, Otherwise, you add more lines Then Tanka will now define. Gloom [This message has been edited by Professor Gloom (edited 12-09-2000).] |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Marge~ You ARE too kind. Now maybe I can start putting something artistic in my Tankas Sunshine~ I will attempt the Tanka-Haiku-Tanka format one of these days and, as I said above, I will try to be a leetle more artistic in my efforts Prof-Gloom~ My first time to hear from you. Thanks. Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
wonderful done.....but I must aware you, these forms are very addicting.....its great to do ....looking forward to see more. Charisma |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Sweetie, I think you did fine........do another one!....... -SEA |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
well, this brought a huge smile to my face...CUTE!  hang in there, write more tankas and i'll continue reading |
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