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SpitFire
Member Elite

since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

0 posted 2000-10-03 08:22 PM

Ankles Twisted Shy

tattered washings snapping in
the breath of winded bee's
down 'round ankles twisted shy
through tangled whispering trees,
threaded life on songs of air
on voices strolling by
up through frail and cracking cage
to neverending skies,
secret times unfolding in
days of wishing free
hidden pieces falling slow,
...please just let me be.

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2000-10-03 08:32 PM

SpitFire~ Dear one, I have no idea what this means but it sounds so cool, I love the way it rolls off the tongue.

-SEA

insect
Senior Member

since 2000-04-22

Posts 1014

2 posted 2000-10-03 09:37 PM

Hi there flaming heart!

Your sweet voice whispers free
Now is the time to make it be
Hugs and kisses sent your way
All for smiles in your day

Flaming smiles for you and your poem

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

3 posted 2000-10-03 09:51 PM

SpitFire,

Hi you!! Wow to this one my friend!! It is wonderful writing. I like it . . . reads like a little song. So nice. I will let you be as long as you promise to be okay.

Take care.

LW

Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

4 posted 2000-10-03 11:11 PM

Hi there, good to see you. Your writing still strikes me very strongly. Hope you are ok.
Sandra

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

5 posted 2000-10-03 11:32 PM

sounds like alot of talking (whispering) behind your back. I understand the frustration you may feel...just keep your head high and walk in confidence. Great write from you tonight

Martie

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

6 posted 2000-10-03 11:42 PM

spit fire--I love this...it is like you have taken your fancy and ridden it all around the yard.

tracie66
Member Elite

since 2000-01-18

Posts 4713
Australia

7 posted 2000-10-04 03:27 AM

Little spitfire~
I felt longing in this, not that I totally understood it but a longing I felt.
HUGS
Tracie~

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

8 posted 2000-10-04 08:54 AM

SF ...
i had to click on this just cause
of the COOL title alone ...
and the whole poem is WAY cool ...
you have some very unique and creative metaphors here ...
excellent imagery ..as well
but what strikes me the most is how much emotion you have expressed in so few words.
VERY well written poem.
very cool indeed

"secret times unfolding in
days of wishing free
hidden pieces falling slow,
...please just let me be."

heres to getting free ...
later-wrote-an-awesome-poem-gator
jm

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

9 posted 2000-10-04 10:36 AM

WOW! All the way through...WOW! Just love the way it flows, and the message, the wistful longing, and everything thing about it!

This could only have been written by you.

WOW!

jwesley

[This message has been edited by jwesley (edited 10-04-2000).]

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

10 posted 2000-10-04 10:42 AM

love it..

Christopher

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

11 posted 2000-10-04 09:04 PM

taking a moment to say that this is just... cool. I know, a glowing reply, but I did it - catchy title!

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