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Only Women Bleed
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Only Women Bleed |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
~Only Women Bleed~ Wide open, full throttle ... unchecked, unabashed ... never ending need. Watch as the wound opens again, watch as my heart (and pen) begin to bleed. There's way too much of me here ... and it's way too much for you. You cant handle me like this, not even if you hang the moon ... then paint it blue. Stand back from this flame ... as I intend to burn. Can you feel my heat ... do you know I never learn. A spark never extinguished, no one can satiate this desire. On your best day ... you cant put out this emotional fire. Write my name across the midnight sky, and still I wont know content. Give sacrifice on bended knee ... and still ... this ache of mine will not relent. Paint me a rainbow ... catch me a falling star, try as you might ... it's never ... ever ...enough. I'm sorry ... I don't mean to be like this, I'm trying to spare you ... go ... before the going gets rough. I've just always been this way ... always restless, never satisfied. Don't try to keep up with me, I'll only leave you regretting having tried. Don't take it all so personally, it's not about you ... it's about me. Don't let me drag you on my way down ... you know ... misery loves company. So just let me throw this fit ... just stand back ... stay out of the way. And you should know ... if you miss it ... there will be another one ... come light of day. So kiss me once ... kiss (or kick) me twice ... then let the games begin. But remember you were warned ... my pleasure always ends up my chagrin. (I just take it on the chin) (and then I bleed again) Janet Marie **note: I would like to say that I dont for a minute believe women have a lock on pain and hurt. Anyone who has a heart "bleeds" and we all know poets bleed from deep. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
whew! bleed AND burn, JM! Great title! Drug me right in...and I wasn't even kicking and screaming... really good stuff here! Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet--When you can express the ache like you do...torch it, burn it...pour it out into cyberspace...then you light the whole sky. You have power in your words...that's a good thing! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You know I know this mood...lol..OH BOY!!! "let the games begin..." and them that knows me, just leaves me alone at times like these...LOL I love this one sweetie...I know the urgency of this one. Hugs for you, of course, and I'd offer you a valium, but unfortunately I'm fresh out...Love ya lotz. |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Janet, Oh I have been visited by this mood quite a few times  You express it so well.. I have to many favorite lines to mention. I just loved the whole thing!  ~~Tara aka rp25 :o) |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
yeah, and it's a wonder they can bleed for 5 days and not die  enjoyed this one, JM  |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
~JM as always your work touches deep within. this one speaks volumes woman! loved the imagery and the way your words have a voice all of their own. take care. love ya, amy "The head learns knew things, but the heart forever more practices old experiences" |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
So what you are saying is that you are not just an 8 second bull in the rodeo of need!!! Hhmmmm good thing life comes with a back brace to fit into. Now I know that you can be a Witch with a capital "B" at times but isn't that what makes you special and more passionate when you are being loved as well. Excellent write my friend and you already know that I love this one. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, For a minute I thought you had purple blood. COOL GATOR. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Sun ... Yea...I thought the title works well too, my thanks to Alice Cooper for the borrow(great old song btw) really dating my self with that too LOL ... glad you weren't here "kicking and screaming" cause it seems I am ... dont know if the forums can handle both of us having a tantrum at the same time  thanks for the read poetice sunbeam. Martie... dont know if i should "pollute" cyberspace with my yakety yack LOL as for the "power" in my words ... those on the receiving end of these "fits" just think IM really LOUD ..(you know) thanks for always "getting it" my sweet, wise friend Sen ... yes I KNOW that YOU KNOW ...and "they" know too ... me thinks its time for a hex or two ... light a candle for me ... *winkiewinkie*thank goodness for poetic purges or me thinks me would bleed out me eyes ... me thinks me just did in this one LOL and ya know my cure all .... RASBERRY TEA BABY!!!! nectar of the gods me love ya me twin of bleed and need . Rose ... we all feel this way sometimes...if nothing else it makes for some expressive inspiration...thank you for always coming in and reading kind poet. Dor ... sometimes me thinks its like that line in "purple rain" ... when they say .."shes got it backwards" ... only "not bleeding" for 5 days ... the other 25 are the PMS days thanks girlie Amy , thanks sweetie..you know me ...always "wordy" LOL .. good thing me pen bleeds as well. *smile* Mark ... thank you baby ...me thinks ya know me well now ...and I know this cowboy aint thrown easily ... thank you for understanding me and my ache so well ... as well as ALL my "itches" ...thank you for always being so patient ... love ya and your line of bull *winkiewinkie SY ... LOL ...purple??? me thinks it more like black and blue .. and a COOL from YOU ..is WAY cool for ME thanks Kool-aid gator . thanks guys love ya me |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
I really like this one Jan!!! You have penned this emotion so perfectly. Now how did I know that of anyone, YOU are the one person who could write this without a flaw..... Marina Adding to Library collection........ It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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ladiemichelle New Member
since 2000-09-30
Posts 3 |
I read your poem and loved it!!! I read it to my husband and we laughed and laughed...I don't think anyone could have described this mood any better than you have...Words, in this case, speak far louder than actions |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"Stand back from this flame ... as I intend to burn. Can you feel my heat ... do you know I never learn. A spark never extinguished, no one can satiate this desire." "Give sacrifice on bended knee ... and still ... this ache of mine will not relent." WOW Janet Marie! Talk about POWER in this piece ... my goodness, I almost had to sit back from the screen for fear of being torched!!! What an excellent read, expressed so incredibly well ... loved this JM!!! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
JM- "not even if you hang the moon ... then paint it blue." "I've just always been this way ... always restless, never satisfied. Don't try to keep up with me, I'll only leave you regretting having tried." "Don't let me drag you on my way down ... you know ... misery loves company." what a fiery piece! there are just some lessons that must be learned the hard way. and there are some of us who never really think the hard way is right, so we always go back for more... people say that we all need a helping hand, but sometimes that hand just holds us back. what fantastic thoughts... for most poets, learning the hard way is the only way. (and it's great subject matter for writing!) as always, my smile shines in admiration and my hope glimmers for you. great writing. someone should check the lock on that assylum door... Everyone's got their demons. We all got somethin' to atone for. |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Janet Marie I liked this one. I kinda found it intense and that kept my attention all the way through. Although you clarified that women do not have a lock on pain, they do show and deal with a lot better than men.(coming from a male prospective) Garfield |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
this poem does bleed and ache, so much so that I just want to give you a huge hug and let you know that your friends are close by. Oh Jan, again I am blown away by your poetry emotionally raw and honest... I hope that the pain and heartache eases quickly. I wish I had words of comfort but all I can say is I am here anytime take care Eve-super-poet-agator. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Wow.....they need a new security fence in this place...**winkie winkie** You know how much I KNOW this one don't ya...and you know how cool I think you are for this one don't ya...and You know how I think that "witch with a capital B" is the ONLY way to be...cuz if you are going to be anything...even if it's once in a while it BETTER have a Capital baby!!!! Stand back from this flame ... as I intend to burn. Can you feel my heat ... do you know I never learn. A spark never extinguished, no one can satiate this desire. On your best day ... OOOOOOOOHHHHHHHHH YA!!! but don't let them stop trying Love ya girlie gator!!! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Janet Marie....girl, you are a TIGRESS!!! Wow! Of course you know that telling a man to stay away because you're too much for him only makes him more determined to show you that you're not...where's the sign-up sheet? This is incredibly good writing, btw |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I had so much i wanted to say about this Janet, all I can say now is Wow! , this is sensational! I am glad that you put that note in there though. "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Marina ...Hey girl.I saw your LAST post ...me thinks you do just fine speaking your mind LOL and I'm honored to be in your library Thanks gator-girl ladieMichelle ... Welcome to passions ... and Im so pleased both you and your husband enjoyed my poetic tantrum... ...I look forward to seeing your poetry.Kit .. why thank you my dear ...your enthusiastic replies have a power all their own. They make me smile...TY my sweet friend. E-baby ... I learned to pick that lock a long time ago..just like you did TY my poetic pal..I do so love when you read me and read me so well. ggrn3 ...TY .. i was going for intense ...always seem to feel that way ... thanks for the male perspective ...it my favorite view Bri-gator ...you always find the perfect word to describe what I'm feeling. Yes, RAW...and I'm fine I promise...just venting poetically.. but YOU KNOW ME too well....TY my sweet friend ...so glad we get you on the weekends. Holly....LOL..if they build the fence higher ... WE WILL GO UNDER... they cant keep us out...Shhhhh...dont tell warden is that a Capitol B for "Bleed" of for..... YEA..I KNOW LOL so nice to have a fly by from you my sweet SS....*kisskiss* Balladeer ... LOL...and MEOW baby ... and you dont need a sign up sheet ..you got a free pass ...(RUN screaming) me thinks a free pass to me is like one of those cards in Monopoly ..."do not pass go...go directly to Jail" TY for the incredible BTW ...made my poetic day Eagle ... Thank you for the WOW and sensational ... what a great way to start my day .. Thanks for the morning sunshine from down under |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
JM, WOW i'm bleeding out my eyes after reading this no holds barred piece. BUT... deep down I'm going "yeah girl you tell it like it is" Awesome. Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Well fools go where angels dare to tread... So on one knee, I guess one kiss won't be enough for this heat... What how low should I bend? P |
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jinxed Member
since 2000-09-27
Posts 86 |
ok gotta add my "terrific" to this one...sigh...you sure do put out some fantastic writing girl |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Kethry ... thank you so much for your enthusiastic reply ... ya make me smile P-Man ... one thing you will never be is a fool ... can I just say I missed ya and you'll just know ...*winkie winkie* (off those knees ... thats my job) LOL  glad your back babes Jinxed ... thank you for yet another read to day and I really like your work I read today too... thanx guys jm |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
JanetMarie~ This is very deep and heartfelt, my dear friend. I know what you mean in this. But don't worry, we all go through this ( I know -- I do, too), but I don't think I'll turn and walk away. If I get caught up in your fit, I can weather out the storm. But know that you have a friend beside you!!!! Love Ya~ T ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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