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it's all yours for the taking
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it's all yours for the taking |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon 
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scattered across the carpet lay remnants of last night's coming together records of our life bills magazines lists a love note from you to me (which I watched you put in the trash) children's school papers and I wondered where it had all gone to does love drain out of someone like water from a bath-tub? does it go into hibernation to sleep through the hurt? and when you asked me questions about falling in love I wondered if it was me you had fallen back in love with and my heart sat unbeating waiting for the bittersweet words to fall and when you asked me how to know when you had become too close to a friend my heart began to beat again in fear and as I asked her name the word you spoke was the name of my best friend and I can't feel right inside since and won't feel right inside again if you were looking for paybacks for past wrongs..... you found the key hurt me by taking the ones I dearly love away take my children by hurting me so badly emotionally that I am afraid of my capability to care for those sweet little boys take another thing.... after my friends after my children take the one who believes in happily ever after take him too it will all be your triumph (the preceeding was written in despair...I have since added a stanza) take them all for I know in my heart they'll never go the only one who went and the only one who will go is you [This message has been edited by X Angel (edited 09-28-2000).] |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
wow. what a magnificent piece of writing. it's been a while since i've read something so raw in here. it is very sad but it's also very conveying of it's message. i send my condolences (i think i spelled that wrong...) and my empathy. i do hope that the despair has passed. from the sound of the new stanza, i'd say it has or it's damn close to bein' gone. great writing and thanks for postin this up. "When you feel like you've had it up to here 'cause you mad enough to scream but you sad enough to tear... that's Rock Bottom." |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Take care of your soft heart...someone will Love you...James |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Heather--so sad to see the hurt that two people can give to each other when a relationship dies...I have been there and believe me there is a life after as your last stanza shows...Hugs! |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
gotta love ya!glad you came up with the last stanza  |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Count your blessings, Heather. His last actions tell you everything you need to know. There is a life waiting for you, my friend...  |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
X Angel, Oh, so sad and heartbreaking in the beginning there. It is amazing how easily those memories are discarded at times. I have to say, my heart stopped there too while reading this. Wonderful writing. Nice ending my friend. Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Heather~ Oh, hon ... the things we learn one ache at a time. No one ... and I mean NO ONE can destroy your capabilities as a mother ... For the kitten from within will roar like the lion to protect her den. I hear your roar ! *Hugs* ... ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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