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Love on the Rocks
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Love on the Rocks |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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Love on the Rocks My eyes are half open or maybe half closed Or just in a state of a waking repose Eyes that were sparkling now have grown dim For they hold the glimmering memories of him So pour me a glass of love on the rocks That is the sparkling key that unlocks My heart to accepting a new love some day To replace the one that I let slip away Play me a melody, tear me apart Pluck every sorrowful string of my heart Hand me that drink of love on the rocks Maybe tonight opportunity knocks I had a good man so tender and dear I don’t see anyone like him in here So pour me a cold mix of lonely and blue And play me a little memory or two Let me dance to the truth of the day I never knew how to dance anyway But pour me a bottle of life for my soul And bring back contentment to fill up the whole Turn up the music and play through the night Let my heart witness a little delight I can get through these heartbreaking shocks With some friends and a glass of that love on the rocks My eyes are half open or maybe half closed And what lies ahead for me, nobody knows Elizabeth Santos |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Elizabeth~ I'll take a shot of affection with a twist of attention and a side of romance.........ugh, I felt this. Fantastic poem  -SEA |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Elizabeth-- this is so heartfelt...the pain and longing in it mixed with the beauty is amazing. a wise poet once told me...that sometimes our best work comes from some of our hardest and lowest moments...i tend to agree with her...one of my favorite of yours for sure...here's a hug to go along with that drink. take care. ~amy~ |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
Liz, WOW! Loved this... it could almost be a free-write, and still you meld the lines into perfect rhythm. So creative and melancholy... really wish I’d written this one. If I were to repeat all of my favorite parts I’d have to repost every line… so I’m leaving it as is, which is perfect. Beautiful job! Thank you so much for this read! ~ Beth |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz---this is so beautiful and full of longing...I know it would make a wonderful song...it is so perfect in rhythm and rhyme. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, Your rhyme have wrung my bell to a chime Rings in a circle forever in time. I wish you the happiest the best of the best Perhaps he's not worthy the nest of your test. Love Sy |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
With the exception of your poem about Toe, picking a favorite from the gems you write would be an impossible task... but this certainly joins those particularly close to my heart. [This message has been edited by suthern (edited 11-09-2000).] |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
You are forever bringing tears to my eyes...whether they be tears of joy or laughter or as now sadness...hugs to you and heres one on me ok? Don't close your eyes to the possibilities |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Elizabeth~ Well written, but oh so sad. Hope is around the corner if we don't drown in the bottle. Sadly many go that route. Deb |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Ah Liz ... perfectly wonderful! Loved the cadence in this ... flowed so smoothly, like that glass you're drinking from, may I join you? Beautiful and sorrowful thoughts penned with grace and style ... loved this! Best wishes, /Kit |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Elizabeth, I too like above PoetFriends adore the candor in this poem and I sigh for its beauty and sadness within each verse you've penned on screen. Coco |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ok, I'm bringing Neil over, just for you... this is tender and sad, Elizabeth, a spell woven as only you can... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Elizabeth I really love the "Love On The Rocks" theme that you wrote here and how you've tied in with a drink on the rocks and the measure of sadness expressed. I love the reference to memories in the music...really a yearning piece and as usual wonderfully written...... ethome |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Elizabeth....you expressed your feelings so well.....another wonderful piece from your hand.....superb...as always ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thank you all so very much for your response to this poem. I am truly grateful for all the lovely commets. Liz |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautifully done, Elizabeth! Love it! Denise |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Elizabeth~  Make mine a double ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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