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Sweet Release |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Sweet Release Sometimes it is so hard to say what lays behind the laundry and these damn old tennis shoes but I want to dangle this anyway by the shoestring that is hope and walk across the rope into dainty slippers pointing out But when I play it I find I am walking backward away from the blossoms and the garden is fallow listen I will tell you as this fly crawls across the screen dissecting my thought with feet that have been in God knows what obscenity I will tell you that I watch the sky for comment and see it implode like reverse gravity and I want to be sucked in in to this vortex and take this ambiguous feeling and throw it to the core to a place where I have never been where there is a cavern and the echo of my voice saying yes yes yes yes yes but it is so far and there is no map So I walk on grass with bare feet and wait for the gardener to rake up all my thoughts and pile them into colorful so I can jump into their center and toss them into what for and then lay with them in sweet release |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I can only shake my head and smile at the ease in which you create such beautiful poetry.....well done, MArtie ") |
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SEA 
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Martie~ you create vivid images in my mind...they kind of hop skip and jump about.....and fit together perfectly....  -SEA |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Martie This was beautifully penned. Can a little kitty kat come play with you and chase your thoughts with the gardener. Maybe I'll catch one and revel in its bliss because your thoughts are so beautiful. Thanks for the wonderful read.< !signature--> Garfield [This message has been edited by ggrn3 (edited 10-27-2000).] |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Martie- Choosing between what's behind the laundry and the imploding sky... WOW! And you view this wih such enviable clarity (yes clarity) ... Need I say I thought of rolling in fall leaf piles today? |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Martie, I enjoy the way this piece seems to come from the depths of the forest floor, pushing its way toward the light. A pleasure to read. Robert Joseph |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Hi Martie, I like when you write like this, I get to go with you. Love it!!  Marcy |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
deer--so glad to hear that I made you smile. Sea--Yes, they do hop about...I'm glad you see them fit together after all that...thanks for letting me know. Garfield--sure you can...but you'll have to put up with my cat, Needful. Thanks for saying such nice things. Bill--I'm glad you saw clarity..because I wasn't so sure, myself. Robert Joseph--I just love your reply...as lovely as a poem...thank you. Marcy--glad to have you with me. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Yes I want some of this sweet release...James |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
Martie, I can only echo deer's reply - it's astounding how you manage to produce such quality in such quantity P |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ You took me to the backyard - plopped me down in a leaf pile loaded with the most amazing thoughts - I think I'll just stay right there ! Love n' hugs~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
James--I don't think I have enough to give you some of mine...I'll bet you have some right outside your door..thanks for the read. Thanks Philip--poetry keeps me going. Marge--So you're the one that threw that thought at me....thanks! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Raking them up to jump in again...what a wonderful write from you my friend. Sometimes we just have to accept the most simple things in life regardless of what we think we want. Why do you think the little things are so inviting to us in the first place? Ever notice that we find ourselves as adults looking around to see if someone is watching and when we think all is safe we just go for it...too bad we so often lose that innocense we carried as a young child. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautiful, as always, Martie! Denise |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Martie, may I catch one of those colorful thoughts of yours and enjoy it for all it's stunning beauty? Marvelous write, as always...you never cease to amaze me... *Krista Knutson* "One can never consent to creep when one feels an impulse to soar." Helen Keller |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Martie, sigh... the way your poetry makes me feel, is undiscribable. Excellent as always little one Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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