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the world still turns |
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desperado Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 312FT Hood,Tx 
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I never thought I'd see it all I never thought you care couldn't see you walk away and never saw you there I don't know what to think my doubts sometimes consume me as shadows fall my heart I don't believe all I see I must hear it all the time and feel it to believe to take your words on faith alone is sometimes hard to conceive don't be offended if I doubt that's just a part of who you see and the hardest words I have to say are the words I believe in me nothing I do is good enough I live a life of little rest too good to get better too bad to be the best so what does this make me? does this make me even worse? I need your love to heal me but I tained you with my curse so here I am in darkness and despair hidden in my gloom and broken by you and the world still turns and breathes as I wait to know what I do |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Des: Your writing just keeps getting better and better. It seems I've caught you on at the same time tonight. I wish I could say hello in a more direct way! Wherever you are, be well! ((HUGS)) *Jenn* |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
BUMP! Swimming against the current here. Beautiful poetry should not be missed. |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Des* Well done, so much feeling in this poem. Keep the pen working my friend. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Hey desperado.... A piece packed with many emotions...... Sad, scared, lack of trust, and a touch of confussion. Great expression and flow!  ~Sheri "The things that come to those that wait may be the things left by those who got there first" |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Hey James... Nice work here - I particularly like the finale... Life does have a way of happening around us, doesn't it??..  |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
great poem, full with your emotions. your expressions were penned terrific here. take care ...Charisma |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"and the world still turns and breathes as I wait to know what I do." Excellent writing...James |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Des~ Hello there .... *Hugs* from here ! 'I live a life of little rest too good to get better too bad to be the best so what does this make me?' Makes you a poet, my friend. You take care and be well. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Desperado, this is a complicated piece, and no doubt about that, with the speaker in limbo draped on Cupid's wing, still waiting for something, anything, to show him where he stands. Very good poem you have here, although I wouldn't be me if'n I didn't note one thing: tained should be spelled tainted.  Alicat, the Persnikitty If I were any more laid back, I'd be in a coma. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Desperado, first of all, I wish I could borrow your name, cause it expresses me more than the one I use. As for this writing, very interesting, covering lots of issues. It is hard to trust, and even harder after you are betrayed in some way. And what is it about the world going on like nothing happened, no matter how much pain you are in? Take care, and I hope you find your answers. Sandra |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
James, Wow - man, how I've missed you. This is awesome in the depths of the emptiness it brings to the reader. Loved the line: and the hardest words I have to say are the words I believe in me Hope you're doing o.k. You know I was in Florida for about three months - you would have saved me oodles of despondancy had you beent there... Good to see you hangin' out again though. Keep writing. Michael |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Hi Desperado, I am quite impressed with this rhyme you share. The woven expression thru each line just kept the reader wanting for more... Loved it my friend Coco |
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desperado Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 312FT Hood,Tx |
wow thanks for all these comments. it quite literally took my breath away. I can't tell you how much this both pleases me and makes me feel blessed. thank you for all of your comments. I wish I was able to actually be on when you guys are awake, but living on the other side of the world is a pain in the ass at times. hehe oh and mike, how do you know that I wouldn't have laughed till I cried at your situation in florida. I'd have helped you for certain, but I'd still get a few chuckles.  take care all of you, and thank you. "There were times in my life when I was going insane tryin to walk through the pain when I lost my grip and I hit the floor yeah I thought I could leave but couldn't get out the door" - Aerosmith "Amazing" |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
very nice reading...well done Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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