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Drowning In My Tears
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Drowning In My Tears |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now 
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“DROWNING IN MY TEARS” by Bill Charles It’s been awhile since I left you, and went on the road, but I didn’t know, there would be so much sorrow… If someone would have said to me, and only told, that I would be this far away, and so very cold… I remember the closeness, of your loving touch, as the warmth from each other, was felt, and so much… But my journey is one of coldness, will it ever end, or will it go on forever, as I round each lonely bend? Time has many mysteries, but it interfered in two lives, that had everything they thought, but never saw the strife… Perhaps it was about small things, that seemed strange, coming apart from each other, never recognizing the change… Then it was too late, and the closeness seemed to vanish, these feelings that we had, all we did was to demolish… Broken hearts and broken dreams, things we couldn’t undo, we could not change the ways, which the walls between us grew… A weeping heart within that can’t be seen, is so very painful, I’m aware, for it feels as if, it wants to break me in two… And it cries very heavily, and my eyes fill with tears, because of still wanting you, even after all these years… But know that the tears come easier now, a flood from my eyes, and as they comes down my face, I always seem to agonize… I feel, as if I’m coming apart, for the deluge never disappears, and I believe that I am drowning, “I’m Drowning In My Tears”… |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
BC~ this is so sad... and you write with such emotion.....very well done.  -SEA |
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Rainydays Member
since 2000-10-21
Posts 324 |
Bill, what an excellent depiction of the misery and regret of love lost. Very nicely written. I'll throw you a life preserver if you'll throw me one, as my sea of tears has been rising of late as well. Thank you for this sad, lovely poem. Rainydays |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Good morning SEA, Yes, sad it is SEA, but so true for who knows how many. Thanks you for your kind comments. Good morning Rainydays, One indeed that is sad, and of love lost. I accept your life preserver, and I am sorry for your tears. Thanks for replying to this writing, and for the consideration of your comments. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
A bittersweet read, you tell of a love that is lost and the sorrow of regret so well! You made an overused term "drowning in my tears" very unique with your words. I sadly relate to this poem in my present life and it touched me. Take care, Melissa Honeybee The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Bill, Such sad writing that conveys a deep sense of lonliness within the lines. You are right, so true for so many out there. I have felt it myself. Great expression and emotions in this one. Take care, Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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ddgoose Member
since 2000-07-25
Posts 250Baltimore, MD, USA |
BC Very sad poem and penned with much emotion. Sniff, sniff - need kleenex. didi |
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Ariana Senior Member
since 2000-10-08
Posts 571Orlando, Florida |
Bill I have read your poem several times and the loneliness and hurt comes strongly through. You need hugs - I hope you are feeling better. Ariana [This message has been edited by Ariana (edited 10-22-2000).] |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Such powerful emotions in this beautiful piece Bill! The longing and ache come pouring through the lines with such impact ... very well written! Best wishes, and hugs to you! /Kit |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Bill-Sad and touching, poignant feelings, so hard to control when love fades away. I understand where you're coming from my friend, hugs to you. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Couples can grow one of two ways - either together, or apart... Growing apart is easy - How sad it is that we don't see it coming before it's too late... Growing together takes much more effort - But it surely reaps a more bountiful future, doesn't it?... Nice work, my friend...  |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Good evening Melissa, Thank you so much for your consideration when commenting on this writing. When writing this, I felt a lot of different emotions. I am sorry to hear that it relates to you in your present life. Take care, and things will change, as they cannot help but do over time. Evening Lone Wolf, A'hhh, but you are so very perceptive to detect this. I would like to thank you for your kindness and thanks for coming by. Evening ddgoose, Thank you for your comments to this writing, and I have two boxes of Kleenex if you might need them. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Good morning Ariana, Ariana, I try to write with feelings, and from reading your kind comments, perhaps they came through in this writing. Thank you. And, one or two hugs wouldn't hurt. Good morning Kit, Yes Kit, many emotions are in this writing, as you have surmised. And I thank you for the considerate comments that you have written. And, thank you for the hugs! Good morning Gemini, I would like to thank you for stopping by to read this writing I have done. Your comments are touching to me, and I appreciate them. Thank you too, for the hugs. Good morning Nan, Thank you for your kind words of wisdom, as they are most true. Perhaps couples should pay more attention to their surroundings with each other, but we both know it takes much work. Thanks Nancy, you are special. |
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