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Death of a Mundane Life
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Death of a Mundane Life |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida 
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He lies hinged on the cusp of forever versus never and from this height where stars are lost to novas – black the pendulum of time clangs loud ‘gainst chambers torn, heart-broken stillness heavy slides in puddles suffocating …Silence …waiting (waiting) “Now!” he cries “I must know now!” no, not yet Needing fearing fathomless black ringed purple pre-dawn promise he strains to hear the trill of the Mockingbird to feel Feel caramel warmth in sunlight kisses ‘pon softest waiting lips but no more could the dawn approach hastened than he may breathe the air of light premature “rest” he hears “rest and await thy time, be at ease with the flow and ebb of fate…rest” though life persists mundane, a thunk of the clog passing time – he lies sheltered within the heat from a distant Sun …Waiting (waiting) for Her to rise [This message has been edited by Satiate (edited 10-19-2000).] |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
just what i needed tonight very good yuh we both posted simultaneously and used the word pendulum and thats gotta be a groovy thing yuh |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
rest” he hears “rest and await thy time, be at ease with the flow and ebb of fate…rest” though life persists mundane, a thunk of the clog passing time – he lies sheltered within the heat from a distant Sun …Waiting (waiting) for Her to rise Absolutely Beautiful Satiate  Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Of all the poems written in this form I do believe yours are my favorites...this was excellent! |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
your use of indents and fonts adds so much to what you convey - I do not find it all disturbing but enhancing - I really like it - I could see a number of ways to interpret this - I'd love to know what you were thinking |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Ok - So I still don't have much to say... Nic - about the best I can do is offer a gushing praise - not only have you grown as a poet in the (my gawd - already???) almost year that I've known you... but you've also grown to be one of the best friends someone could ask for. Aside from an incredible talent, you also have the kindest, most sincere heart. I am proud and grateful you decide, for whatever masochistic reason, to put up with me. I treasure this as I treasure our friendship. Keep rockin' lady and I'll keep readin'! C |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
to feel Feel caramel warmth in sunlight kisses ‘pon softest waiting lips That is just SOOOO awesome!!!! |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Nic Nic... wow wow wow The sun hey? Yeah...I can see that...coming into the dawn...beautiful, hopeful image. Nic - you have so outdone yourself with this. I love it. This is my kind of writing. It is something I can respond to on an initmate level, and on a stylistic level too. Please be proud of this one hon. Hugs... (still like orange...??  )K"He looked across the silky surface of the Severn... it was a famously difficult river with fierce tides..." From Jack Maggs |
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