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Sunsets |
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Klondike New Member
since 2000-10-17
Posts 9 |
I sit and watch as the Sun goes down, as It sits on the Edge of the World, its falling, and rising Somewhere out there. The setting is settling and I am Just sitting, Settled But the thought of The Sun Setting setting. I watch as the Clouds take on the colours, The Clouds Fill with red, Purple and Orange, The colours in no Special order just Seam to Arrange. This Sun is falling and Rising at once. I'm Just a Boy - I'm Just a Dunce yet I get to See this wonderful sight, of the Sun going down - turning the day into night. (In the first part I experimented with rhythm, while In the Second part I experimented with Rhyme, apparently Orange and Once have no Rhymes  ) |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Klondike, It seems strange bout that word orange and you know that once could rhyme with punts even though the spelling's not the same it's so much fun with the rhyming game Btw I loved the imagery of the poem. Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Klondike~ Enjoyed your sunset colors. While I can't help with orange ... you might like knowing that bunce is a good rhyming word with once - *bunce - n. a sudden unexpected piece of good fortune Hope you find it helpful ... What good fortune !  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
loved the imagery of this. colors and description gripped me. orange and once are those funny words in the english language that don't have many words that rhyme with them. i was going to say ask marge (she is very helpful) but i see she already has responded lol. she's great like that! take care. ~amy~ |
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Klondike New Member
since 2000-10-17
Posts 9 |
Thanks Guys I Tried to Stray away from the cliche sunset Colours, and creat imagery with thoughts and structure more, but then I did try to Hide it heheh Either I hid it too Well or I Totally Suck I prefer the Former :P |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Klondike~ Wonderful imagery in this, loved your thoughts on the sun setting...lovely read Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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