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jlocke Member
since 2000-09-10
Posts 169CC,TX |
My first attempt at a paradelle Broken Circle A broken love she gave me A broken love she gave me I live with this tortured heart I live with this tortured heart With a tortured love I live She gave me this broken heart Now crippled by her deceptive lie Now crippled by her deceptive lie Undying memories circle inside my mind Undying memories circle inside my mind Deceptive memories by her undying lie Circle inside my now crippled mind You understand this hurt is terrible You understand this hurt is terrible It lies buried in my soul It lies buried in my soul My hurt you understand is buried It lies in this terrible soul Terrible memories in this mind live I gave her my undying soul You understand she hurt me Deceptive love lies inside a lie Now tortured, crippled by my heart With a broken circle love is buried Love is the law, love under will. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Jlocke~ I'm not familiar with this style of writing, although I have seen it before..I really like what you've written here. Can you explain the rules of this kind of writing to me please? Thanks.  -SEA[This message has been edited by SEA (edited 10-17-2000).] |
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jlocke Member
since 2000-09-10
Posts 169CC,TX |
SEA~Nan has the rules in the Poetry Workshop (A Paradelle for Ocktoberfest...) |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
This was so sad...but beautifully written Don't close your eyes to the possibilities |
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Unfamiliar Junior Member
since 2000-11-10
Posts 11 |
jlock, you are beautiful. YOU are beautiful and it shows from the inside, that's where I spotted it....absolute solid gold, it's a treasure, protect it. |
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