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Tears In The Rain.
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Tears In The Rain. |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
That last night you kissed me I would never have imagined Our relationship would expire I know it broke your heart The day I stood in the rain Refusing to take the ring back. The love we had for each other Will never be experienced By either of us ever again I loved you so dearly,and you me The times we had I'll always remember Even though it has been years How can I ever forget your touch. Hours we spent talking Days we spent in each others arms That first kiss, your first Is entrenched in my mind Every time I think of that moment The tears are nearby, happy tears. I will always love you More than anyone close to me Because you cared until that night Tore our love apart. I know you regret it And I know you still love me. I missed the film that night As I waited for you to come home. Even though your mother Did tell me your best friend Had enticed you to accompany her Little did you know her intent She hated me for loving you And took you to someone else Who served you the best of drinks And then used you for the night Whilst, I waited for you. I waited long and hard Knowing you could not face me again It was not your fault And when I did see you All I wanted to know was if you Still loved me. The rain hid my tears But I could see yours You gave me back the ring And you said sorry I whispered softly 'I will love you forever' Whenever I think of you My only real love, I see a lifetime That never happened. I hope you have been taken care of As good as I would have cared for you I will never forget you I know you still think of me. < !signature--> Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) [This message has been edited by Daniel J D (edited 10-16-2000).] |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
Daniel, is this based off of actual personal experience? If so, my dear, I empathize GREATLY. What a tearing subject... you've opened it tactfully and with a somehow subtle optimistic view. This is a very nice piece. ~ Beth |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Elizabeth, You guessed right. She has had an impact on me now which will live with me till I die. I was 19 and she was 18 when we parted. It was her wish, and I respected her. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Broken_Winged_Angel Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994Small Town, Somewhere |
Oh wow. I was really impressed when I read this...I had to share it with my ex...And I can really relate to where you're coming from in writing it. I'm looking forward to seeing more by you.  Always, Broken Winged Angel ~ Nicole With a little piece of tomorrow, You'll have to kiss yesterday goodbye. Because today won't last forever, And the past will only make you cry. |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Nicole, I am so happy that I was able to bring back some of the good memories in your life. For me it has not been easy, once contact was lost, we never saw each other again. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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your_babydoll Junior Member
since 2000-10-12
Posts 13ohio |
Reading this truly made my heart ache for you. I wonder sometimes if its a good thing that such beautiful writings come from such sad experiences.. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Daniel* This was a very moving piece that touched my heart with the words from your soul...a beautifully bitter-sweet poem. Excellent work~ |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
Daniel, I guess everyone goes through someone they truly love but then sometimes the love is gave back as we plan, I'm so sorry, but I know you've heard the phrase if you love it go and if it's meant to be it will come back, it's very true. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JD~ This is a poignant memory you've shared. I can only guess that she was a good memory to keep. I believe in keeping and revisiting our memories ... especially when they touch us so deeply. A memorable write. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
nicely written JD..we all remember a special someone from our past..the one who makes our heart skip a beat as mine did when i was 18..everytime i saw him i would freeze haa..and try to act so cool..if he only knew how he made me feel..he was so conceited i didnt want to make his head any bigger haa..so i always acted like he wasnt anything special..he was older then i was and not just in years..i know this is kind of gross but on my first date with him i threw up my dinner when i saw him coming haa.. i was so nervous about going out with him haa...if he only knew...enjoyed JD A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
It takes a strong person to let go, and you have displayed that envied trait. Excellent write, my friend, and *hugs* to you!  sp  Of all sad words of tongue or pen, the saddest are these: 'it might have been.' -John Greenleaf Whittier |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Daniel JD...this is so sad...she didnt even give you the chance to love her through this...and it sounds like you would have... |
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BirdeeB Member
since 2000-09-16
Posts 106USA |
I know thoses feelings sometimes too well. Exquistite..(spelling?) BirdeeB |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Snowpants, For years I have battled with this heartache, I am still not over the pain. BirdeeB, So glad I was able to share this with you Marge, Thank you so much. Yes, she will never be erased from my memory. Butterflies_dont_cry, Your kind words make me feel like a real butterfly, flying freely. Your_babydoll, I think it is best to pen such feelings for others to experience Marge Rosebud Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Rosebud, I only wished she had asked me back, I really feel she felt so ashamed of that night. Victoria, Oh Yes, she made my heart beat and still does. The impact she has had on me has made me a better person no doubt. Paula Finn, Yes, I definitely would have treasured a lifetime with her at my side, in fact an eternity. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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