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--- Eyes Of The heart ---
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--- Eyes Of The heart --- |
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The Lonely Stranger Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 361Upstate, NY, USA |
--- Eyes Of The heart --- The eyes of the heart always see strongest. The eyes of the heart remember the longest. The eyes of the heart see the lovers gone by. They remember the hurts that led us to cry. They would guide you with wisdom, to a love that could last. They would see through Adonis and help you look past. But the eyes of the heart are sadly, part blind, The eyes of the heart see only behind. When your heart's eyes look back, to the now and the here, When the Adonis you chose has left you in tears, When your heart’s eyes have opened, to what always was there, Will the eyes of my heart, allow me to care ? [This message has been edited by The Lonely Stranger (edited 10-15-2000).] |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Awesome and very true. Good work. Elizabeth Something sweet, something sort of grandish, sweeps my soul when thou art near... hedeservesbetter@hotmail.com |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
I liked it!  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
beautuful LS... perfect rhyme flow .. and very cool usage of the eyes and heart as metaphors ... and I like the last verses question.. yes... how long will ones heart wait for anothers eyes to be opened ... great writing take care jm |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
This is beautiful, and has gone into my library as one of my favorites indeed!! I loved everything about this one...such a great job you did in writing this!  Follow your dream! |
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The Lonely Stranger Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 361Upstate, NY, USA |
Elizabeth Vandana Janet Marie Sunny1 Thanks for stopping in for a read. I'm not a prolific writer because I don't usually write unless inspired. So when nothing is going on with my life, the pen runs temporarily dry. I am particularly honored that you added this piece to your library. That always lets me know that I got that spot deep down inside. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
TLS* This is most definately my favorite of yours to date...I of course reserve the right to update that decision as needed as I can tell with each poem you grow more as a poet each time...this is beautiful...we should all see with the eyes of our heart as you have shown so beautifully~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
As you stated, when your pen flows it really flows. This is a beautiful piece of work and the eyes of the heart always see what is truely there unmasked and in all life's essence. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
LS...like the little ironic twist at the end...because we KNOW it happens that way...well said, m'friend... |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
I enjoyed this..yes sometimes the eyes play tricks on the heart..or as another poet i know said..sometimes love plays a joke on us..but we forget to laugh.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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The Lonely Stranger Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 361Upstate, NY, USA |
Butterflies - Thank you for stopping by to have a read. I think it is so interesting that some poems touch different people. That was just a quick jotting down of feelings that I had. Mark - Thanks for the compliment. I try not to write for the sake of writing. Sometimes I wish I could coax more out of myself but it just doen't work. Is it just me ? Or do others find this to be true ?? serenity - It's a shame that it DOES happen this way, we seem to be in such disarray everyone looking for the right person. Victoria - Thanks for the read. You are right, our heart plays tricks. I suppose there is something we should be learning from these tricks. If you have a clue what we should be learning, I'm all ears LOL. |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Love the tittle and the poem Wonderful read! |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
TLS~ WOW  this is so strong, I love the end! -SEA |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
What a wonderful write you present with this one LS. It truly makes one think. Well done indeed. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I'm back, but I just wanted to get this into my library. LOL..I'm new to this thing, sorry for the inconvenience. *s* |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
The Lonely Stranger-Very powerful words here, the eyes really do see very sensitively. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
YES...when you look at me dont look at my face...but at the heart within...Thats where true beauty resides...beautifully written and what wonderful thoughts you have expressed |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
so true.......thank you for sharing this beautiful poem with us. Charisma |
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The Lonely Stranger Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 361Upstate, NY, USA |
insect - Backatcha! I can always use a smile huh !--------------------------------------------- SEA - I'm glad you liked the poem. I try very hard to slip a little lesson in my poems. Hopefully it isn't lost in the reading and hopefully the author can retain his own lessons. --------------------------------------------- Gentle Spirit - I am flattered, to be in another writers library means a lot to me. --------------------------------------------- Gemini - I'm very glad you liked it, Thank you. --------------------------------------------- Paula Finn - "when you look at me dont look at my face...but at the heart within...Thats where true beauty resides" That is so wonderfully stated. truely you undertand the content and frustration of my message. --------------------------------------------- Charisma - "thank you for sharing this beautiful poem with us." Poetry is nothing more than sharing our feelings in a way that people want to bother to hear them :^) thanks for listening |
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Poet's Sister Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 80North Carolina |
Oh, if only the eyes of the heart could see as cleary looking forward as they do looking back we could be spared so much pain....but then probably miss out on many pleasures as well. Nicely written.  |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
this was a very heartwarming poem and so true that so often our heart looks back and not forward, the heart does see so many things even when you think you have your heart blindfolded, enjoyed this alot. |
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